Book name: Empress Of Disgrace
Author: Gumnaam_Ladki
Reviewer: Anika
• TOTAL MARKS- ①⓪⓪
|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.
-5/5
There are many readers who are enjoying the story and their interactions are positive with Author.
|- 10 ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.
-7/10
The book cover is attractive and eye-catching. You used good choice of image, fanart of daechwita. The cover tells that story genre is historical or something related to royalty, hence it matches the plot so you did good job. The font and colour of title is perfect but don't keep the size of below text the same, make it smaller than the first one. The black quote below is barely visible, please make it more visible for reader's eyes. Make some changes with Author's name too in the cover.
|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ.
-5/5
The description is masterpiece. It excited me to I read the journey of strong women. The font text also gives more alluring vibe. The grammer and the way of narration is really eye-opening. Readers will really not resist the book after knowing it revolve around powerful women and love of gorgeous king Min Yoongi.
|- 10 ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.
-8/10
It is quite eye-catching, it tells the female protagonist is being ascused as they called her empress of disgrace. It matches the plot but the readers probably thought they are calling her disgrace because she raise voice for women's rights but when I read the story, she is falsely accused of being adulterous and she is only a princess till now.
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.
-4/10
Then princess of hind, Vaani who is ambitious and have desire of throne but it can't be granted as she have to marry the crown prince of Goryeo. She fell in love at first sight with his bodyguard Yoongi who is the actual royal blood. The story revolves around her being obsessed with him and making plan or helping Crown prince reunion with his love one. It isn't what readers were expecting, the reason why reader choose to read your book because they wanted to read more strong female protagonist but not someone to get madly obessed with bodyguard. The story gets boring if it doesn't matches the plot, the way you portrayed in the description, title and cover.
|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.
-16/20
Your grammar is perfect but I found few minor mistakes. Also write first letter of first word in action tag with capital after quotation mark.
Punctuation:-
Chapter 1,
With a hope that this alliance between the two nations would probably prevent the Turks from feuding with Hind they engaged the little kids to each other.
Reviewer: There should be comma after "hind" and don't give space between "Eachother" You did this mistake throughout the whole book.
Chapter 3,
"Yes, why're you smiling like that."
Reviewer: You didn't add question mark (?) in the end.
Chapter 3,
Then who is he, and why did he take part in the tourney in the Crown Prince's place.
Reviewer: Same mistake here, You didn't add question mark (?)
Chapter3,
"So you sparred as a man?" Jimin says, interuppting Vaani's chain of thoughts.
Correction: "Jimin asked"
Chapter 9,
"How did you get a lot of all these coins?" The boy says stunned by the weight of the pouch.
Correction: "The boy asked"
Chapter 15,
Vaani, who is mildly perturbed by the news, lets out a frustrated sigh.
Reviewer: There should be Apostrophe (') between letter (t) and (s) of "let's"
Chapter 19,
"But if you do that, you'd have to marry his father instead, says Yoongi
Reviewer: You forgot to add quotation mark (")
Mistakes:-
Chapter 2,
And while she's still trying to calm her composure she she waddles towards the next door,"
Reviewer: You wrote "she" twice here.
Chapter 9,
Though, no one knows of them accept the Crown Prince
Correction: "except"
Chapter 12,
"Why did you say that?" Vir eyes Vaani citically before whispering into her eyes.
Correction: "critically"
Chapter 25,
He legs suddenly starts to oscillate.
Correction: "Her"
Chapter 25,
He acclaims, aggressively squeezing her wrists.
Correction: "exclaims"
Chapter 16,
"He steps between Dae-won and Vir and eyes Vir with a furious face"
Correction: "and eyes (him) a furious face.
Reviewer: You wrote Vir twice, it become cliche.
Grammer:-
Chapter 12,
"Who were they? Did you see their faces?" asks Vaani
Correction: "asked"
Reviewer: The verb should be past tense after dialogue.
Chapter 13,
"His royal majesty has requested your presence in the throne-room, your highness," says Lady Kim Ye-na, knocking at her door.
Reviewer: She said that while knocking or before knocking?
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.
-9/10
The way author portrayed the story is very attractive. The fact that Vir lack in everything but still selected as crown prince and Goryeo being most powerful kingdom whereas hind was opposite. The author gave many good life lessons and motivation for example:-
1. Chapter 7
Being a women doesn't mean I have to be his slave, marriage is a partnership not an enslavement
2. Chapter 4,
In the same way, we all have experiences that affect us in ways that we develop certain behaviour patterns
There are much more, the public message is the gem of this story.
Kim Seokjin being head of royal guards is attractive. I love the entry of Suga in the story, it was totally like k drama. I love how she tied her brother Vir inside dresser of his own cabin for tourney and the best part she won the sword fight.
I got shocked due to plot twist. I thought Yoongi is crown prince but it turns out he is bodyguard of Jimin who is the prince but it's kinda funny how both of them cheated in tourney.
The biggest plot twist in the book was Jimin loves Taehyung. Even though Jungkook already made correct theory about him, I just thought he is making up assumptions.
Vaani being excited for coronation made every readers restless for upcoming drama. It was funny and interesting how Jimin faked the suicide. The readers were excited to know what they were plotting until they got another shock and that is Jimin getting abducted in real and the unknown letters, it was quite interesting and confusing.
Second biggest plot twist was Yoongi is the real heir. I can't wait to see more what will happen, the current king is very toxic, he doesn't deserve throne.
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.
-6/10
The roles you have given to the every characters really suit them, for example Taehyung being physician is what suits him more in this story.
Vaani:-
I really love her and her sarcastic comebacks are great but the emotions weren't much delivered through her character. What I mean to say, I wasn't able to feel sad nor happy while reading her grief or cheerful parts. but in new chapters, I could sense her sorrow and emphasize with her. I didn't understood her at some points, when she wore long dress in her first training day and that time too when she couldn't fought two drunken tipsy men even though she is so good at sparring. I'm pretty sure she should know martial arts if she knows how to use sword in correct way. I was disappointed, it was her chance to rant her feelings out by beating the two drunken men and the fact she looked so different instead of strong women at the time or all the time.
Min Yoongi:-
I really love Yoongi in ths story because you displayed his character perfectly. You delivered emotions through his character greatly but his mood swings confused me just like Vaani. He switches his face faster than anything. I felt bad for her.
Jimin:-
I really love his character development and all background story you told regarding him and Yoongi. I could totally understand his point of view as he was very decent character.
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ.
-6/10
I love every starting of the story, the image, font and designs are attractive, plus in the beginning the female protagonist is being roasted for trying to be boy. This strikes reader's interest and the fact the younger brother is the heir. It made readers curious how she will cope with it to get her rightful throne. I feel like I'm in the story while looking at picture. The introduction of character is amazing and interesting. I was totally emerged in the story, it was totally like Kdrama. You are really perfectionist at describing or narrating the story.
Your writing style is smooth, understanding and very easy to read. I can totally picture everything you wrote as we readers imagine all the things the author writes but at some parts you miss out details.
Chapter 5,
During dialogues, you miss out details and you don't write realistic reactions. "His royal magestic has assigned me as your new guard" I was expecting reaction from Vaani, whether is shock or something but she continued her conversation like nothing happened. The reaction are rushed too, Yoongi agreed to the day off without pause, I was expecting his reaction like taken back or little pause before he agree to it and head out. You need to write action tags with dialogues.
You didn't wrote when she stood up and walked to door before the leaning back at the door. Remember, readers imagine everything you write, I was imagining her sitting all this time until you wrote that and my imagination got mixed up and ruined the mood.
Chapter 5,
I thought the bedroom was next to princes of hind. Where this dorm come from?
Chapter 6,
When he was rearranging her fingers. I don't understand how he was close to her face and his breath brushing her neck?
Chapter 10,
The poet was pretty and the font you used for it.
Chapter 12,
I thought she grabbed the sword and was expecting blood oozing out from her hands.
Chapter 15,
You miss out details when Vaani pushed Vir away from Suga. She didn't shout or anything but only pushed him away and had conversation with tears. That's unrealistic.
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.
-10/10
I really love your story, you are really talented and creative author. Please don't get demotivated, I just did my job as reviewer by telling honest criticism. And to be honest, I'm sure your books will get famous in the future. You nice, keep going~
TOTAL MARKS: 76/100