-Faith against fate by naveena_bts [Rev. Suzy]

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Title: Faith against fate

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Title: Faith against fate

author: Naveena_bts

Reviewer: Suzy 

No. of chapters: 14

Title: 4/10

The point is...aren't fate and faith both in the same direction? If we try to answer this in a rather philosophical manner, Taehyung and Jungkook were FATED to meet again but there are many more incidents where fate and faith aren't against each other, you get my point? They were fated to break apart and meet again and Taehyung had FAITH that Jungkook would care for him. The title, though okay, is a very controversial one for your book and I'd suggest you change it. Go for something rare and unique yeah? A title with a dark meaning, one which would suit the book well. 

Cover: 4.5/10

It looks more like a magazine cover and gives off CEO vibes so try to add some elements and filters which gives off mafia vibes. 

Description: 0.5/5

So...the thing is, you don't write descriptions that way dear, it's long, very long to the point that until the readers would reach the end, their interest will be long gone. When you play a game, you don't show all your cards, keep some hidden, save some for the end and reveal them slowly. That's how you write a book as well, if you spill every detail this easily then I'm sorry to say that your book would be barely enjoyed by your readers. Plus, there are quite some grammatical mistakes, 

sentence: 'What has going to happen now…' 

corrections: 'What is going to happen now…' or 'What might happen' 

Also, you sound like a news reporter giving out news instead of a writer describing their story, so work on your writing style. I'll give you an example for a part of your description,

Original: What has going to happen now....... will jungkook

kill the 6 year old boy.......... Who was the person

whom jungkook was finding ?? Why he was finding

that person ?? What he was going to do with that

person if he find him ??

Will taehyung be able to find his son ?? and

Who had kidnapped taehyung ??...... What the

kidnapper want from him ??............

Original with corrections: What has ***is going to happen now....... will jungkook ***Jungkook

kill the 6 year old boy.......... Who was the person

whom ***word not needed jungkook ***Jungkook was finding ***looking for ?? Why he was finding

that person ?? What he was going to do with that

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