The title is apt but not intriguing enough, there are plenty of books which go with such titles so you can go for a better and rare one. Something like 'circumstances' or much better one's would be suggested.
Cover: 3/5
There isn't much editing done, the cover isn't messy and the title placement is accurate so it'll do fine, but you can always go for a rather aesthetic one.
Description: 2.5/5
Too short but considering the fact that your book is a short story it's quite enough, you can add a few dialogues from the book and use some special fonts or annotations as '❝' along with dialogues to make it more attractive.
Reader's interaction: 1/5
Surprisingly there are merely any comments, i can understand how disappointing that must be given the fact that the book is actually a good one, also, since it's supposedly a new book i hope more people starts reading it and interact with your work💜 I'd suggest you to add some fandom inside jokes or use your own sense of humor to add funny dialogues wherever the story is getting a little dry. There are parts when you're taking just enough time to give the descriptions but you can use a punful way to word out situations and keep your readers attracted.
Rules: 5/5 💜
Plot: 7/10
The plot is just a little cliche, but there are enough additions to make it enjoyable enough. I personally found the confession part a little rushed up, i do understand that it's a short story but their relationship seems to be based off attraction and infatuation, now before you attack me, yes i understand that their relationship is much more than that but show us! Write a few details or situations before the confession, it's upto you if you wanna make any changes though💜
Grammar: 18.5/20
Amazing! your grammar is accurate and simple. There are few wrong comma placements and you can anytime check about that. I would suggest you to use diverse vocabulary and use different phrases.
Plot twists and attraction: 6.5/10
Pretty unexpected plot twists. There were a few which were actually unexpected so i appreciate that. Your book still doesn't seem to get readers hooked up, so i believe you need to work a little on the attraction part, especially the cover.
Emotions and character development: 2.5+3/10
Emotions are well portrayed but again I'll stuck upon the confession, let them have some more moments.
Creativity and way of writing: 4+3.5/10
Your work is creative and brilliant! I loved how you kept everything simple but not blunt. I'd suggest you to use few metaphors and idiomatic phrases to add the cherry on the top.
Your opinion on the book: 6.5/10
A good read, with enough amount of plot twists and scenes. I'm not a fan of sad endings but in the fourth chapter i already lost hope when Chanyeol went like "the child." I mentally scolded him since no matter what a person can get a child anyhow, either by conceiving one or adopting one, so i personally don't appreciate his choice but fate and luck always knock the door on most unexpected times, so i'd rather be thankful that his choice didn't go in vain. Now, i'd like to congratulate you for writing a short story with only 5 chapters so beautifully! I read quite a lot short stories as an award judge but honestly speaking, among all of the ones i read, i found yours the best, it doesn't end in a swift, each chapter is long and descriptive enough and you're amazing for doing it right! Also, a confession, I'm not a exo-l, *coughs* sorry I'm not sure if i even know the boyband/fandom name, i just know the protagonist's names since i've heard it quite a lot, but the fact that not being a fan didn't became a hurdle in reading the book is something appreciation worthy. I'm not a fan and for your book i didn't even need to be one to understand your story (not that I'm not going to check 'em out on YouTube) so basically your book is readable for any random non-kpop fan as well, great!💜 You nice, keep going!💜
Review:
Areas author is good at: quick yet descriptive enough writing, plot twists and story plotting.
Areas author has to improve in: graphic designing and story pacing.
Any tips for the author: cover, title and description can be modified. I'd suggest you to give each chapter an aesthetic name.
TOTAL: 69/100 [ ¯\_( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)_/¯ ]
Thank you for choosing me as your reviewer, *whispers* i know you must be cursing me to review your book second while it was supposed to be first but i sincerely apologize for it, i was a little occupied with stuffs and got a little skeptical thinking that it'd take me some extra knowledge to be able to understand the story but it was not at all that way. Thank you for being patient and cooperating! Sending lots of love!💖✨ I hope your books gets recognized by many more people in the time to come!💜
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