#174 Crystal Blue

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Crystal Blue by @GiftiFikir

Already read some of this - look at the comments I already made because most of the info will be useful.

Commas before names.

Dialogue wasn't formatted right. Take a look at the critique before this where I've explained how to write dialogue correctly. I'll tag you in it.

Simple grammar wasn't adhered to.

Tense jumps were sometimes there.

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