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#109 Dangerous Billionaire

Dangerous Billionaire by @PrincessBlu06

CHAPTERS 7-9

The rules that apply to dialogue also apply to thoughts.

You had some off-putting phrases that needed to be reworked but I commented my suggestions.

Dialogue tags should be in lower case. (I found many examples of this).

Good plot twist with Paris on the road.

No speech marks needed for thought (I only saw one occasion).

Your/you're

Good descriptions. I would have liked you to describe the new characters more.

Overall, a great continuation. Keep it up!

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