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Alike by @Hallie_May

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Don't use semi colons as commas.

," she said.

Use this as example^^ It will help you so much.

You need commas to split clauses.

You had so many tense jumps (your story was originally in present tense but then you jumped to past somewhere in one of the chapters and then continued like that for the rest of the way. I think there's a lot of confusion as to what tense you should be in so stick to one.)

Numbers spelled out completely look more formal.

Comma splices were quite big. Don't separate two full sentences with a comma. Use a semi colon or a dash instead.

Beautiful description (especially of the house and of the mother's death).

Basic grammar was sometimes not adhered to. Keep checking it.

The plot was relatively cliché. Hmm.

Overall, an OK attempt. Keep at it!!

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