#38 Restless Thoughts

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от xanabanana66x

от xanabanana66x

Restless Thoughts by @Doctorwicked

I liked the short chapters with the poems. I think it was really effective having just a short but snappy poem at the beginning.

'Voidness' was a used a lot. I don't think this is a word, though. I would just stick with void.

Good rhyme was used. I liked the crafting of the last poem that I read.

Maybe make some poems longer? I mean I haven't read the full anthology so I don't know how long the others are but I think you could mix and match with some short and long. And maybe try to tell a story that all of the poems link into. Just a thought.

Overall, a lovely set of poems. Sorry I couldn't make this critique any longer. I hope my comments helped.

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