#140 Blade Of Mercy

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Blade of Mercy by @acidcorona

Not much to say about this.

Characters were world rounded and the world building was vast - well done.

Loved Lidya. She was strong and a perfect MC.

I think you could give a little more description of the she-cat. It intrigued me.

With dialogue, after the comma, the dialogue tag should be in lower case.

Also, in the last scene of the last chapter, I think you could make it a lot more dramatic and drag out that last encounter at the graveyard a little more.

Please look at my comments for other details.

Overall, a fantastic beginning! Surprised not many people have read it!

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