#85 The Tangled Princess

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

The Tangled Princess by @nonameleftxx

These chapters were a lot better - probably the best I've seen from this book! Your grammar has improved immensely and so has your writing style.

Descriptions were good as were the characters. They're developing nicely and taking a 3D shape.

When you have a long speech and separate it into different paragraphs, you still need the speech mark at the beginning of each of the paragraphs but not at the end.

There was a very good description of the fight. Very few (and I mean VERY FEW) minor errors.

Overall, I can really see this coming along. No bad comments at all! Well done!

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