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#138 Where We Find The World

Where We Find the World by @Chapter-Seasons

Emotion was greatly conveyed, especially in the poems. I liked your use of repitition to really get the point across, which really inflicts emotion in the reader.

Great structure (like I commented on). Loved how the poem continued to the first line of the first chapter.

You were brilliant at raising questions in the reader - I was constantly wanting to know more about the world she was in and Tiana's past. However, maybe add a little more description and detail as this will really enhance the writing.

When writing dialogue, put the dialogue tag in lower case.

The prose was lyrical and almost read like poetry, which I found very special.

Some paragraph break issues but they were minor.

Overall, a fabulous start. Keep it up! (Oh and I love the patterns in the chapter names).

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