#86 Elemorts

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Elemorts by Muaaz-ics

There really isn't a lot to say about this book (in a good way I mean.)

There was brilliant description and great character development with showing not telling.

I would suggest putting a glossary at the front since some the terms just popped up and I didn't really get them but yeah, I think something like a glossary would really help the reader so they can flick back and just double check their knowledge.

I'm not sure why Jayrock was wrongly convicted. I mean he was in the right the whole time and he had a terribly hard choice to make!

Great plot twist with Zablaron!! That really came as a surprise.

Teeny tiny mistakes but barely any.

Overall, a brilliant story. There is fantastic potential in this.

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