#119 Wielders: Protectors Of The Realms

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Wielders by @ChloeShepherd810

The start was incredible.

At one point you had an unnecessary half paragraph break (I think it was).

The one liners were great.

Ellipses only need 3 dots.

Comma splices were quite prominent - only need a dash or a semi colon to split them.

Great tension and action. Apart from that, everything else was in place and running smoothy. Well done!

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