#92 The Crazy Side Of Love

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

The Crazy Side of Love by @makayla_ED

You need commas to split clauses. Commas weren't really there in general which made reading quite difficult.

There=not here
Their=belongs to them
They're=they are

Basic grammar needed improving. Like the conjugation of verbs and apostrophes of possession.

At one point you had many exclamation marks. I don't think you need quite so many as one normally does the job.

The prologue definitely needs editing. (Myabe start with paragraph breaks).

I mentioned lots of things in the first paragraph. Use this as an example and apply it to the rest.

New speaker=new line

An + vowel

It was sometimes a little confusing as to who was Seth. I think it may have been down to the dialogue and putting things in the same line.

The 1st chapter was a lot better. Keep it up!

Blond=male
Blonde=female

Commas before names.

Great tension in the prologue. It made me want to keep reading!

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