#165 Not The Fairest

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Not the Fairest by beautifulpoetic_

I really would love a bit more description - I found the prose a little blunt.

Dialogue was sometimes not formated right. Make the dialogue tag a lower case.

I loved the twist in the retelling - really clever.

Great characters - including Snow. You made her such a brat and I really really didn't like her. :)

Overall, a really good and original start. Keep it up!!

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