Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

The Beard

Author: @sky_is_limit

Chapters: 10 chapters

Genre: Teen Fiction

Specific: Personal Enjoyment

Book

Cover-

The cover is beautiful and colourful. At first, I didn't understand the use of all the flowers, but then I realised maybe it's a reflection of Emie's style since she likes flowers and bright colours.

Blurb-

Your blurb is great. You have the right amount of information to entice the reader. I couldn't find any faults.

Grammar-

(Chapter Six)

Your grammar is spot on until the first paragraph of this chapter. You switch from present to past.

A few examples need changing...

"The rain had completely stopped now."

"My clothes were stuck to my body and my hair was matted to my forehead."

A suggestion could be...

"The rain dies down, and my clothes stick to my body like a second layer." or "The rain has stopped now."

The second paragraph also needs changing as you switch tenses.

Your examples...

"My eyes squinted as the sound of the car door slamming was heard."

"My heart sped up..."

"My prayers are answered..."

(Chapter Eight)

Again, you switch back to the past tense. These are just some minor changes that need editing.

Your examples...

"I stood outside Sebastian's car with my arms crossed."

"My bag was starting to weigh down on me, the straps hurting my shoulders and making them sore."

"He gave a small sigh before he walked away and to the other side of the car."

Suggestions could be...

"I'm standing outside Sebastian's car, folding my arms across my chest."

"The bag straps start to weigh heavily against my shoulders, making them sore."

"He sighs before walking to the other side of the car."

Punctuation-

I couldn't find any mistakes in the edited chapters, but small typos are in the unedited ones. Very minor mistakes that a few people have left inline comments for.

Character Development/ plot –

I love that you write the definition of what being a beard is all about. I've seen your book a lot of times during my Wattpad journey and always thought it had something to do with facial hair.