Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

Touch: Saving Ai

* This review may contain spoilers * 

Username: JaxCreation

Genre: Paranormal 

Chapter: 5 chapters (I know originally you requested 11 chapters, but because I'm pushed for time, I'm trying to set my default to 5 chapters only). 

Specific: If I feel satisfied or if it leaves many questions unanswered 

Book 

Cover - 

I saw that you recently changed your cover. I liked the previous cover, but this one looks amazing. I feel like this is a more fitting option as this is how I picture Evelyn to look. It also has a slight animation feel to it. 

Blurb - 

I love the blurb. I couldn't see any faults. 

Grammar - 

Your grammar is great! Since you replied about the one issue I had, I couldn't see any issues. 

Punctuation - 

I didn't notice any errors with punctuation! 

Character development/ plot - 

(Chapter One) 

From reading the first chapter, I can already tell I love the premise of your story. It reminds me of 'Ghost Whisperer,' a program I used to watch. She has a gift, and in this chapter, we get to see how these visions take her away from reality and how they leave her feeling afterwards. She has a choice: to help save Ai, or to let her be murdered knowing her fate. 

I love her interaction with her friend. Their conversation was funny at times. 

(Chapter Two) 

I really like Evelyn's style of voice. It's funny and captivating. I like the small introduction about the new character, Gwen, and how she introduces Ai to Evelyn. Each scene flows smoothly to the next as Evelyn sort of gets to know Ai with a possible intention to help her, but also because Ryo wants to ask her out. 

It must be tiring to go through each day where you see a dozen different visions and outcomes of strangers' deaths and you can't do anything to help them. 

I'm surprised that Evelyn also saw and knew who the killer was from Ai's 'soon to be' murder. It took me a hot second to realise what happened after 'the voice' part to the vision with the kid tripping on the track. But the way you lead us up to the ending and left us on a cliffhanger was thrilling. 

(Chapter Three) 

I'm so glad she was able to save the boy from facing his fate. I wanted to know if there is any consequence of her meddling and saving the dead? Like, as in 'The Final Destination franchise where if they skip their dooming death, death always seems to follow. So, will the boy end up dying another way? 

I genuinely love Evelyn and Aunt Linda's humour. With Evelyn, I feel like she uses humour to cover up her emotional trauma as a coping mechanism. 

(Chapter Four) 

Gwen is surprisingly a nice friend, offering to stay and take care of Evelyn while her hand heals. 

I really like the voices you put to your characters, especially with Ryo and Evelyn. Their banter is so relatable.

Hopefully, Gwen can persuade Ai to join in with the slumber party. I do have one question, though - Why doesn't Evelyn tell Ryo about the vision she had about Ai? Wouldn't he understand, or is it because he would be really pressed about it? Since he likes Ai, I'm thinking he would want to help. 

(Chapter Five) 

To be honest, I can't blame Ryo for being concerned about Evelyn and her visions, knowing well she can't save everybody from her visions, but I do think they should openly talk about it. I get the impression she is more scared about reality than Ryo. After the near-death at the train station, I thought Ryo would believe her visions because otherwise how did she save a boy from being plummeted to death by a train. I just find it a little odd how they are both acting around each other. 

Until now, we don't really know much about Evelyn's 'gift'. We only know that she can see visions of individuals dying before it actually happens. At what age did this start to happen to her? Does it run in the family? I can't remember if this was mentioned, but I would also like to get to know about her family a little more, besides Aunt Linda. 

Overall Enjoyment - 

I really enjoyed reading your book and I'm invested in what happens to Ai. I hope she manages to save her in time. Hopefully, I can finish reading in my spare time because I need to know the ending. 

Overall, I can't actually find any room for improvement. It seems like you have a well thought out plot with realistic characters and engaging dialogue. 

Keep writing & I wish you all the best with your writing journey! 

Thank you for requesting the review & I hope it helps you in some way. Please check, "Touch: Saving Ai," if you have time.