Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

LOVE STAINS

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Firstly, sorry that this is a little late. I'm late with the reviews due to personal issues. 

Title: Love Stains

Author: @rosesforlove

Chapters: 5 chapters

Genre: Romance

Specific: Anything

Cover-

I think your cover stands out well as you have paint smudges to represent stains. The colour pink represents love and romance, which fits the genre you have chosen. Even the title, which you have chosen to be white and blue contrasts well against the pink.

Blurb-

Your example.

"Tell me Xyriel...what do I get?"

I don't think there is a need for the Ellipsis in this sentence. An Ellipsis is like a pause or an omission of words. Personally, I think it would have a better impact if you used a full stop to make it abrupt.

It's also good to put a comma before a person's name.

Here is my suggestion.

"Tell me, Xyriel. What do I get?"

Your example.

"I...I don't know Hyatt." I stated in between tears.

I think here you could swap "stated" for "stuttered" since you have the ellipsis at the start, this would fit better. Obviously, this is totally up to you.

My suggestion would be this.

"I...I don't know, Hyatt," I stuttered in between tears."

Make sure to put a comma before the name and at the end of the sentence before the dialogue tag. (see above for example)

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Your example...

"What happens when you get trapped in your own state of mind... Wondering when your answers would be revealed?"

A suggestion would be this...

I think the ellipsis is irrelevant in this sentence.

"What happens when you are trapped in your own state of mind wondering when your answers will be revealed?"

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Your example...

"Would she be able to overcome them or would she learn how to live with them?"

My suggestion would be to swap "would" with "will." Personally, I feel like it sounds better, but of course, it's up to you. There should also be a comma to split up the two sentences.

"Will she be able to overcome them, or will she learn how to live with them?"

Grammar-

(Chapter One)

Your example...

"I shouted on top of my voice so she could hear me through the deafening sound of the mixer."