Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

Rules and Roses

(I noticed that you filled out a form twice for the review ages ago. I didn't notice and I think you forgot lol)

Author: @caity_caitlyn

Chapters: 2

Genre: Romance

Specific: Everything (Likes/dislikes)

Cover-

The cover is quite attractive, and I can understand why you picked the girl on the front. I like that the title ties in with the cover. I think you did a good job here.

The only issue I had was the small writing at the top because I couldn't read it. That could be because of the fancy font, but I think it's your name. If so, I would make it a little bigger as it's something that others should be able to read.

You don't walk into a bookstore and buy a book without being able to read who the author is. It should always be in clear writing.

Blurb-

Personally, I would add this section at the very top (see below for example) and then you won't need the "The rules were made to be broken," because it's included in the paragraph.

"Jackson Scott, a charming, mysterious, recovering drug addict who shows a new coming addict specialist that life doesn't always revolve around the rules but what if there was more to him then she intended. After all, the rules were made to be broken."

I would change a few things with the paragraph (see above).

Note- this is just a suggestion. You don't have to take it.

My suggestion...

"Jackson Scott is a charming, mysterious and a recovering drug addict who shows his new therapist that life doesn't always revolve around rules, but what if there is more to him than meets the eye. After all, the rules are made to be broken."

Because you used an extract from your book, it's just a case of adding in punctuation and correcting a few things that I already mentioned.

Tip- try to keep the extract short. I don't really like reading extracts from books in the blurb. I feel like the blurb should be separate.

Grammar-

(Prologue)

Quite early on, I noticed that you switch tenses here with "is."

Your example...

"But, I guess the good thing about it is that in this moment it was completely and utterly quiet besides the breathing of the others in the room with footsteps from above our heads."

Using "is" is commonly used in the present tense, and so far you're writing in the past tense.

A suggestion would be...

"But I guess the good thing about this moment was the complete and utter quiet, besides the breathing and the footsteps from overhead."

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Your example...

"Some of those footprints were light, some were heavy, some were...angry, and some were...something else."

I think you meant footsteps and not footprints because footprints are the mark left behind from the sole of somebody's shoe.

You used "were" four times in one sentence.

An easier way to describe and compare would be to describe the sounds of the footsteps. How does he know they were light or angry footsteps?

I can imagine that the angry footsteps echoed or vibrated against the small confinement that they are in. Light footsteps would barely be audible like they tried to glide across the floor.