Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

After I Fall

Username: CourtneyPeterman0
Genre: Romance
Chapters: 3 chapters
Specific: Plot & Character Development

Cover-
Your cover is perfect! I can't find any fault, plus you can tell the genre is romance from the positioning of the the MC and the other characters.

Blurb-
Your blurb is also perfect. I couldn't find any fault.

Grammar -
N/A 👏🏻

Punctuation-

(Chapter Two)
The only issue you have is with punctuation.
You use a comma in action tags when there should be a full stop.

Your example...
"I burnt my damn arm," the scowl crosses my lips again."

A suggestion here would be...
"I burnt my damn arm." The scowl crosses my lips again."
(This is because it's an action tag and doesn't relate to speech).

Another example is...
"I can't argue with you anymore," Bray glances at the floor and sucks in his bottom lip."

A suggestion here would be...
"I can't argue with you anymore." Bray glances at the floor and sucks in his bottom lip."

Note- only use a comma in the dialogue tag when it relates to speech.

Plot / character development-

(Chapter One)
This is a fabulous and heartfelt chapter. I could resonate with your characters as I've been through something similar.
Abbey's emotions and the way she reacts is reasonable to some degree, yet I can understand Braeden's perspective too. You deliver everything perfectly from setting the scene and setting up the characters backstory, informing the readers about their relationship and the past.

(Chapter Two)
I feel like Abbey started the fight, not because of the pregnancy, but because she is afraid of him leaving her behind for the Army. The pregnancy is an issue added to the mix, and knowing she will be going through the pregnancy alone, probably added fuel to the fire. She had known the results from the test for weeks or days, so why did she tell him tonight on the one night he was with his family?

I feel like what Braeden said was unreasonable. He should love Abbey through thick and thin. If they can't make it through their relationship now, how will they go the distance?

I love that they resolved and made up pretty quickly. It would be horrible to still be dragging the argument after he leaves.

(Chapter Three)
I honestly love your characters. They are so relatable and down to earth. You showcase their vulnerabilities in a superb way.

I can't think of anything else to add. It was a smooth read with excellent and realistic dialogue.

Overall enjoyment-

I actually really felt what the characters were going through. It even made me a little sad as I can expect what is to come. It's almost like I want to warn Abbey not to let him go. It's frightening to think about what military families go through.
It's also unique to see this military theme mixed with Romance.

The only thing I suggest you to focus on is...

-1- Punctuation - I noticed in Chapter Two that you use commas in action tags. I was so drawn throughout your chapters that I didn't recognise any other grammatical mistakes.

You did a great job with your heartfelt and compelling story.

Feel free to ask me any questions.

Please check "After I Fall," if you have time. Thank you for requesting this review.