Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

End of the Tunnel

* This review may contain spoilers * 

Trigger warning - The story contains self-harm, so the review may briefly touch on this

Username: HaniaAdil12

Genre: Short story/ Inspirational 

Chapters: 5 chapters

Specific: N/A

Book & DM

Cover - 

I understand the idea behind the image and title. "End of the Tunnel" sort of refers to reaching the end of the trauma and finding hope at the end. It's the same as saying 'seeing the light at the end of the tunnel' which is what I see from the image on the cover. I guess individuals can decipher the meaning in many ways. 

Blurb - 

Since the book is a little different and aimed at people who have felt or gone through the same experiences, the premise of the blurb is simple and straightforward. 

Grammar - 

(Chapter One)

You write in the past tense, but here are a few examples where you slip into the present. 

"Some would think that as a teenager she is also going through some typical depression. But it isn't some typical depression to her." 

"For a person as strong as her being this weak and doing these kinds of things is very depressing." 

"Many people judge as well and she can't just let her guard down..."

The words 'isn't,' 'is' and 'can't' are common within the present tense. To be able to stick within the past tense, you should use 'it was' or 'it wasn't' and 'couldn't.'

Some suggestions could be...

"Some would think that as a teenager she was going through some typical depression, but it wasn't some typical depression to her." 

"For a person as strong as her, being this weak and doing these kinds of things was very depressing." 

"Many people judge as well and she couldn't just let her guard down..." 

Punctuation - 

There were a few missing commas. 

Your examples...

"All of these problems also disturbed her sleep. due to that her whole routine was disturbed." 

I think the full stop was an error that got overlooked. In this example, a comma would be better because you can connect the two sentences together. The full stop is permanent and stops the sentence short. 

A suggestion could be...

"All of these problems disrupted her sleep, due to that, her whole routine was unbalanced."

I changed a few words because you used 'disturbed' twice, making it redundant. 

Tip - There are some informative videos on YouTube that cover Punctuation which can help. Read about this topic as much as you can, and this will surely help you.