Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)

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5 – A contract and a submittal

As their voices died down, Eden began to feel less like an outsider and more like a person. The anger within her simmered down and all that was left was pure acceptance. Hearing Declan say those words were a gift, one that she'd remember in those dark moments of punishment and humiliation.

How she wished to cup his face between her hand to kiss him. She wanted to forget all this and go back to that moment where they were at their closest. But all she could do was stare at him

"Are you ready to discuss the process?" His hands found their way to her knees, his touch was warm against her shilled skin.

She offered him a slight nod and asked, "Why can't I just sign it now and get it over with?"

"In short, you're leading with your genitals and not your heart, rendering it an invalid signature." He paused, "Our small moment, though enjoyable, can lead to a lapse in judgment come tomorrow morning when our deed is done. It's imperative that you understand that once you sign and submit, there is no going back. You are mine as I am yours."

"Sounds more like a marriage."

"Not nearly as complicated."

"How about the first contract I signed?"

"The one you threw in the fireplace?" Declan rose an eyebrow. "You considered it a joke. It would have never held up in a traditional submittal."

Eden's cheeks heated. She had sign out of fear. Not only did she add her two favorite words for him under her signature, she'd chickened out and tossed it into the flames even before he could see it.

"Eden," When he spoke her name, she looked back towards him, "It's important you sign the contract and submit your will in the appropriate manner, as tradition states, and without persuasion or influence."

"I need to sign under my own free will." She mumbled, frowning. "That sounds very-"

"Intimate?" He finished her thought.

"Yeah."

"It's a very intimate affair." His thumbs rubbed light circles on her knees. "When you sign your name, you're accepting our rules, our laws, and our way of life. In essence, you're telling me you want to stay of your own free will. That you want to join our family. That you want to stay with me."

Eden's hands slide over his. Could she ever get to a point where she wanted to remain her and not go back to her normal life where she was free to come and go whenever she pleased.

"Say something." He urged.

She met his gaze. "So, by signing the contract I'm signing my life away."

"When you get to the point of wanting to sign, you'll never feel see it like that." He paused. "It's why I don't wish to rush things. I want you to want to stay. Some houses force signatures and submittals, but not here. You'll have as long as it takes to get you to want to stay. I won't ever force your hand."

"You'll just make life a living hell for me until I do." She challenged him.

"Not at all." He offered her a weak smile. "I'm teaching you our ways. You disobey, you get a punishment. You obey me without question or hesitation, you're rewarded. You may not believe me, but I don't enjoy hurting you. I must break your wild sprite and tame you. Only then will you be ready to see clearly."

"How do I submit my will?" She watched his thumbs slide over her skin and wished he were touch another part of her body. "Do I just give you the contract?"

"It's a grand affair." He laughed when Eden frowned up at him. "We take our submittals seriously. Some do it in private, with only a select few at witnesses. Others want the entire house to witness their devotion. On a rarer, but equally exciting, occasion they're carried out at auctions balls."

"Like the one Diamond and I went to?" Eden hadn't spoken that name in what felt like an eternity. It felt like a lifetime ago.

"Yes." He said, "Everyone attending takes part in their celebration. The founder's heirs, some of the most prominent men and women in our world. Both masters and slaves."

"Which do you expect from me?"

"That's entirely up to you, Eden. I have no say in when or where you submit you will."

"Like a proposal?"

"Do you want me to marry you, Eden? Is that why you're so intent on comparing the two?" His laugh made her blush. "Have I embarrassed you?"

She bit at her lower lip. Everything he described felt like a proposal of sorts. He doesn't know when or where. It's a complete surprise. She wondered if there were rings involved.

"Are there rings?"

He threw his head back, his laugh loud and contagious.

"Stop laughing. I'm serious." She laughed. "I don't know the first thing about submitting."

"No." He still laughed. "There are no rings exchanged. There's a branding ceremony though."

"What?" All the humor was sucked out of her in an instance.

"Upon my acceptance of your submittal, you'll be branded with my houses mark. Then we'll consummate our bond in front of those who've come to witness."

"This is all so much to take in." Eden's head spun with all this new information. She understood to a certain degree but didn't understand at the same time.

Sign the contract. Submit my will. Get branded with his logo and have sex in front of a group of people for the first time.

"Submitting your will doesn't come easy and shouldn't be rushed. By doing this you're allowing me complete and total control over you, your body, and your heart. I will act as governor and executioner. Submitting means, you trust your life in my hands, that I will always choose what's best for you."

Eden rested her head in her hands.

"Okay. Okay." She was one the verge of panic. "I just-"

Declan brushed her hands away from her face and caught her chin. "Stay calm." His tone was gentle. "We can take this as slowly as you need to. You decide when you're ready." He reminded her.

"Branding?" She asked. "You're going to burn me? Why? What's the significance of that?"

"It's tradition."

"Besides tradition. Why?"

It was his turn to frown, as though he never thought she'd ask him. "Consider it our version of a ring you can never take off. People will know who you belong to and who reigns over you."

"How romantic." She rolled her eyes.

"It truly is. As an heir to a founder, people will look at you with envy and awe. You'll be held above the others because of my name."

"Where does it go? If you say my ass, I'm out."

The corner of his mouth flicked up. "You have full reign over placement and the size."

She wondered what it looked like and where she'd get it.

"And the submittal itself. How does it go?"

"When you sign the contract, you'll present it to me with your undying oath of loyalty and obedience." He said, "You'll kneel at my feet, kissing the tops of them before laying your forehead against the floor."

"Then what?"

"I either except your submittal or deny it."

Her heart sank. "You can deny me?"

"If I felt you aren't pure in heart and mind, yes. I can and will deny it. You must convince me that you want this, Eden."

"And if I did all that tonight-"

"I'd deny you." Declan cupped her face with a hand. "I allowed things to go too far tonight and for that I offer you my apologies. My action's clouded both of our judgment. I'll do my best to not lose control like that again."

"I wanted it." She his hand with her to her cheek. "I'm telling you it's okay."

"In my world, I crossed the line. You're consent or lack thereof means nothing. We hold ourselves to a certain standard and I allowed myself to indulge when I had no right."

The disappointment within his eyes made her hurt. "Can I kiss you? I don't want to talk about this anymore."

He pulled her face closer and kissed her instead. This was all she wanted. His lips against her. No more talk of her signing her life over to him.

When they parted, Declan spoke. "I still need to punish you for your outburst." He stood and held his hand out towards her, "Come."

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