Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)

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By YearoftheAuthor

The following chapter is a flash back that involves child abuse. There are some topics discussed within the next few chapters that may be triggering to some readers. 

Please note that this hasn't been edited yet. It's a raw draft. Feel free to rip it apart. Tell me what you like or hate. I want to make BE the best book it can possibly be so honest feedback is always welcome. Thanks for reading! :0)

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2 – The Magic Trick

**** Flash Back****

Even at five years old, Eden knew life was filled with terrible people, her parents and brother being some of the worst. She sat alone in the hallway closet, tiny body crammed between a broken shoe rack and vacuum cleaner. Above her hung the family's coats, some thick and full for winter, and others thin and dangly with hems that tickled the top of her head as she couched beneath them.

Her parents had left early that morning for work and left her in the care of her brother Keelan. As with every morning, Eden would wake up and sit in front of the tv with a bowl of store brand cereal in hand. She'd silently pray that Keelan would sleep late, past her parents leaving for the day.

Some days, Eden would be graced with two hours of uninterrupted bliss. She was able to relax and laugh at the cartoons character. But it ended the moment Keelan's bedroom door opened.

He'd stumble out of his room in his boxers and a white t-shirt and immediately open the hallway closet. Without a word, Eden knew what to do. She'd turned the channel to MTV and deposit her bowl and spoon in the sink, even if she wasn't finished eating and was still hungry.

She'd then crawl into her usual spot on top of a worn pair of work boots which were tucked between the shabby shoe rack and a dusty vacuum. She wouldn't say a word. She wouldn't cry. For if she did, she knew what would happen.

Eden would stare silently up at Keelan from behind her drawn up knees and watched as he shut the door, sealing her in the darkness within.

If she screamed, Keelan would only turn the sound of the TV up to drowned out her cries.

But this morning was different.

From within her closet, Eden heard the sound of the shower starting up. The water rushing through the pipes behind the back wall of the closet drowned out the music from the tv. When the water stopped, she waited for something to happen.

The closet door opened, blinding Eden momentarily. Keelan stood before her, naked as the day he was born with a towel draped around his slim 10-year-old shoulders.

"Out." Was the only thing he said. "I want to show you something."

When she wasn't fast enough, he grabbed her upper arm and yanked her to her feet. He dragged her toward his room without another word.

The space was a cluttered mess of dirty clothes and left-over dishes waiting to be taken to the kitchen. He shut the door behind them and locked it.

This wasn't normally what happened. Keelan didn't let her out of the closet until midafternoon, right before her parents returned home. He'd deliver his normal threat of violence if she told them she wasn't having fun during the day.

He sat Eden down next to him on the bed and was oddly quiet, which was another difference. Normally he'd be wired, talking a mile a minute. But now he sat there with his hands on his thighs as though he were thinking.

Eden's gaze dropped to his lap, to the small fleshy thing between his thighs. She hadn't a clue what it was.

She watched in question as Keelan's hand touched it, pulled it with his fingers. He caught her staring at it.

"Do you want to play a game?" His hand stopped when his eyes met hers.

"Not really."

The side of Keelan's mouth lifted, "It'll be fun. It's a magic trick? Here, give me your hand."

He didn't wait for her to give him her hand, instead he took it and pulled it towards his lap.

"Keelan no. I don't want to. It's ugly." She tried and failed to pull her hand away from his body.

"It's magic. Don't you wanna see what happens when you pull on it?"

"I don't like this game." Eden again tried to pull her hand away.

"Stop being a brat or I'll put you back in the closet with no lunch."

Tears welled up her Eden's eyes. "Fine. Here." She pouted and handed him her hand.

Eden watched silently as Keelan placed her hand over that weird fleshy thing in his lap before leaning back on the bed and bracing himself up on his elbows.

"Tug on it a bit, but not too hard or I'll hit you."

Eden whipped the back of her other hand across her cheeks. "I want mommy."

"She ain't here. You have three seconds or it's back in the closet. Three......two...... one." Eden grabbed hold of the fleshy thing which was nestled in the beginnings of dark hair growth. She tugged on it once then twice before dropping it. "Nothing's happening. It's not working."

Keelan moved his hips closer toward Eden so that their hips touched. "Give it a second. Just keep pulling on it."

Eden gave it a few more tugs before noticing as difference.

The thing she held was no long soft. It hardened and grew in size. The extra skin hanging at the tip disappeared, revealing a pinkish deformed mushroom cap. When she let it go, the thing stuck straight up from Keelan's body.

She didn't understand what was going on. She only knew that she didn't like it. It didn't feel right.

Keelan laughed. "See, when you touch it and it gets big."

"Can we play something else?" Eden asked, "like dolls?"

"How about house?" Keelan said, that wickedness returning to his smile. "I'm the husband and you're my wife. You have to do what I say."

"I don't like that game either." Eden pouted.

"Touch it again and don't stop until I tell you to."

"Then can we play dolls?"

"Fine."

Eden returned her hand to the thing that had gone soft again. She tugged on it and pulled at it and soon it hardened in her hand. A frown settled on her brow as she continued to pull on it. Nothing else happened.

Keelan laid back with his hands up behind his neck. "Do it a little faster."

"My arm's getting tiered, Keelan."

Keelan pinched her side hard and made her yelp.

"Do you want to go back to the closet?"

"No," Eden began to cry, "But I don't want to do this either."

"Fine, give me your hand loser." His sweaty palm covered her hand now. He took up a much firmer grip than she had, forcing her fingers to curl around the hardened flesh. His hand moved differently too. Instead of tugging and pulling, like she had done, his hand just went up and down.

Eden was confused. She watched Keelan continue the game. When he started to make weird noises, she glanced up at his face which was now red.

"Watch what happens next. It's magic." That grin widened as he moved their hands even faster. His breathing turned to panting and Eden was grossed out by the light sheen of sweat that covered his face.

"Watch what happens." His eyes were glued to their hands and Eden finally looked back at his laps.

Suddenly, Keelan stiffened and almost chocked on a breath. Something warm and sticky squirted from the weird pink mushroom cap and covered her little fingers.

Keelan moved their hands until the fleshy think began to soften. "You rub it until that stuff comes out." He wiped the back of his hand against her palm before returning to the thing in his lap. He proceeded to tug and pull on it himself, as though he enjoyed the feel of it.

"There's your magic." He laughed

"Can I go wash my hand off now?"

"Fine. Then go back to the closet while I clean up." His eyes dropped to the seat of her pink underwear while he continued his tugging. "Next time we'll try your mouth."

Eden acted as though she hadn't heard him. She went directly to the hallway bathroom to wash her hand off. After she crawled back into her closet, took up her set on the worn boots, and wrapped her arms around her raised knee.

She didn't like Keelan's magic trick. She didn't like it one bit.

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