Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... More

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)

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By YearoftheAuthor

As promised, I'm officially back to continue on with Breaking Eden! Please note that this hasn't been edited yet. Feel free to rip it apart. Tell me what you like or hate. I want to make BE the best book it can possibly be so honest feedback is always welcome. Thanks for reading! :0)   

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10 – We Got Ourselves a Winner

Ben paused outside Declan's bedroom door and glanced at Eden. He held her hand in his, not firmly or with force, but gently and with affection, as though his next few words were true.

"Do you trust me?" He intertwined their fingers and offered her a kind smile.

"If I'm being honest, I don't know. I want to though, trust you that is. But-"

"You can't." He finished her thought.

Eden's cheeks turned pink with embarrassment and she nodded.

"One day you will. I would never willingly want to harm you." The corners of Ben's mouth turned up. "But until that day comes, I will continue to prove myself worthy of your trust."

"Thank you." Eden's grip tightened around Ben's hand, trying to convey that she did indeed mean every word she said.

She would love nothing more than to trust Ben, or anyone in this new house of horrors. Trusting the others would make Eden's life less lonely and boring. It would bring her the company she so desired to have while locked away in her room.

"Everything will be as it should in due time" Ben said.

Yet, there was a voice within Eden's mind, warning her relentlessly to trust no one. She was safer alone. The others were working against her, trying to win her will over, trying to trick her into excepting her new situation, excepting them and this house. This was something Eden would never allow.

They only want to cause you pain. The voice spoke within Eden's mind, urging her to hold strong. They wish to add to your misery, your torment. They'll fill your head with lies of trust and love but only cause you pain. They'll trick you into wanting Declan and all of them. Then you'll become one of his mindless Stepford slaves, doomed to serve is every wish.

"Eden," Ben returned that same pressure around her hand, "Are you ready?"

She glanced back down the hallway from which they came, wondering if she could make another attempt at finding another way out.

"Thinking about making a run for it?" Ben asked almost jokingly. "I'll release my fox if that's what you wish to do."

Eden's eyes filled with bitter sadness, "Where would I go?"

"Search the mansion grounds a little more and get better acquainted with the land." Ben sighed, knowing it would be a waste of time. "Perhaps you should find Jude, maybe?"

"She's the one who sent me to you." Eden's gazed shifted toward Declsan's door. "Every ending will lead back to this spot, back to Declan and to whatever he has instore for me. He'll always win won't he?"

Ben spoke quietly now, as though offering Eden a small pep talk, "Listen to Master speak, obey his commands, and act without hesitation. Demonstrate your need for his guidance and control. Allow this to happen and you'll win Master's favor."

"And if I don't? Then what?"

"Then he'll be forced to punish you. It's as easy as that." A hushed laugh escaped him.

"What happens if I do everything you say?"

"Master may grant you an act of pleasure instead of pain. Personally speaking, I would be forever grateful to have won if granted a night in your bed."

"Declan will never grant me anything but pain and misery." Eden's demeaner shifted. She squared her shoulders as the light within her eyes began to dim to a weak shimmer, "Let's just get this over with."

"Eden-"

"I don't think you get it." Her gaze finally met his. "I haven't signed the contract, Ben. And I don't plan to either. So, whatever happens tonight in this room won't be consensual. Declan's plans to beat me into submission. Force my hand to sign." She sucked in a shaky breath and franticly wiped at her cheeks, "The sad thing is that I actually don't blame him. I've-"

Eden stopped herself from finishing her thought. What she wanted to say was that she'd been with men like Declan, grew up with them even. They'd take what they want by force because they could. Those boys then grew up to become monsters and continued their cycle of abuse.

They took and took and took until there was nothing else to take. They were boys like Kelan, men like Declan. Even Ben. They were all the same or so Eden thought.

Ben spoke, "I believe in you. Tell me what you want me to do."

Eden stood in silence, staring that this kind mans face. She wanted to hug him and tell him she forgives him for whatever Declan will make him do. Even more so, she wished to kiss his lips and traced the curve of his smile with her fingertip's miles and miles away from this house.

Instead, Eden didn't respond at all.

She raised her hand and knocked three times against Declan's door so Ben wouldn't have too. It was shortly after their conversation started that she understood that he was staling the inevitable.

There was movement on the other side of the door, the sound of shuffling of feet deep within the room, the loud scrap of a chair echoed from within, and then a muffled voice told them to enter.

Upon opening the door, Eden sunk deeper into the void of nothingness, willing her mind to check out of her newfound reality, yet it wasn't as simple as she hoped. The smoky tendrils of the void, that were once all too eager to drag her back, weren't there. It was as though the void wanted her to earn their protection now, was making her fight back harder than before and forcing her to not give up hope.

A sickening pit of dread settled into her stomach as the sight of Declan sitting behind his desk reading some leather-bound book.

"I've captured the red fox, Master." Ben spoke with complete confidence. His chin high. His gaze unwavering, almost challenging the other man.

Declan glanced up from his book, eyeing them both with a raised brow, "Splendid. Go 'round up the others. Tell them a winner has been announced and a celebration is to commence."

"Yes, Master." Ben released Eden's hand after depositing her near Declan's desk. Then without so much as a glance towards Eden, Ben left, closing the bedroom door quietly behind him and sealing her fate.

Declan set his book down and motioned Eden forward. "Come, Eden. Allow me to look at you a moment."

Eden stepped forward, stopping short of Declan's desk. There was no way she'd allow him access to her. She made sure to keep the wide oak surface a barrier and refused to cross it, even if he told her too.

If Declan chose to grab her, Eden would run, although she didn't know how far she'd get.

"You lasted longer than I thought you would." He leaned back in his chair, crossing his leg over the other. "Did you get a proper look at the mansion grounds? Perhaps you found a route of escape I haven't thought of?"

"We both know I wouldn't be here if I did." Eden's tone was short, almost clipped.

"I suppose you're right." The side of Declan's mouth lifted as he added, almost taunting her, "Then again, maybe you want to stay after all. Stay here with me. With us."

Eden narrowed her eyes, "You think to highly of yourself. Why would I ever want to stay here?"

Declan stood.

The sudden movement made her step back. The pit of dread had now morphed into a churning fear that made her want to vomit.

He rounded the desk then say on the corner of the desk, his gaze devouring Eden silently.

"We both know that's a lie, Eden. You'll fight me, but we both know how this will end."

"How will this end?" Eden took another step back.

"With you on your knees begging me to keep you."

Eden shook her head and almost laughed. "Never."

Declan's gaze dragged up her body. For the first time, he was utterly serious, not a hint of humor to his words. "Stop fighting me, Eden. Give into your desires and all this pain can go away."

His fingertips reached for her cheek, but she side stepped his hand.

"You don't get to touch me."

"Is that so?"

Eden glanced at the bedroom door, "I'll run, do whatever I can to find a way out."

"You had the opportunity yet gave up so quickly. Why is that?" Declan stood when Eden took another step away from him, "Run and you'll force my hand."

Eden's response was to take another step away but now Declan matched her step by step.

"Where will you go, Eden?" His cold stare bore into hers, "Have you thought of that?"

When Eden took another step back, Declan grabbed her wrist, holding her in place with a firm grip. "There's nothing outside the mansion grounds. You're safer here, with me. With us."

"You call this safe?" A laugh bubbled up inside her when she motioned towards his hand on her arm. "I'm as unsafe here as I am out there."

"I'm starting to think you enjoy this, fighting me, forcing me to punish you."

Eden opened her mouth to speak, but no words came, only a deafening silence hung in the air between them.

"I understand your need to fight. They all do at first. But imagine the pleasures you're denying yourself. Give in to me, to the others, in this very room and everything can change." Declan closed the distance, their bodies almost touching, "So I'll ask you again. Where will you go, Eden?"

"I don't know."

"To whom are you safest with?"

The imagine of a smile appeared in her mind, it was kind and gentle, unlike the one Declan now sported.

"Ben." Eden spoke his name with such conviction that it even surprised herself.

Once again, Declan's fingers grazed Eden's cheek. Her response was to only stand there, staring up at Declan, as her mind filling with imagines of her and Ben together, enjoying each other's bodies. Yet those images were fleeting, morphing into a cloud of silky smoke.

Soon Ben turned into Declan. It was Declan's mouth that she enjoyed, savoring his every touch. In this smoky nightmare, there was no pain, only a mind-numbing pleasure that brought tears to Eden's eyes.

Declan thumbed away her tears, "Stop your suffering. Surrender."

She willed herself to give to his touch, his words, his body, but her heart broke inside of her chest. She found herself leaning into his warm palm, her eyelids growing heavy with defeat.

"Were you ever truly safe out there on your own?" His tone was affectionate as though he no longer wanted to fight either. "The world is a cruel place. It offered you nothing but misery, both in body and mind. You suffered a lifetime of hurt. Allow me to make it go away and stop resisting."

A chill of weakness swept through Eden, causing her skin to prickle in goose bumps. She tilted her head back, her eyelids still heavy with desire until their parted lips brushed together.

Only there was no kiss to be had. She inhaled the fresh scent of his breath and forced herself to speak the words roaring through her mind.

"I can't." For a moment, Eden wasn't sure if she actually spoke. All she knew was this. Declan was toying with her mind. Her emotions were in overdrive and he was using them to his advantage by trying to make her believe life would be better here with him, under his control. But it wouldn't, not really.

Declan's other hand came to rest against her other cheek, forcing her head back almost painfully as their lips brushed again. Time slipped by.

When he spoke the coldness returned, "Until you bend to my rules, you give me no other choice. We carry on as normal." His hands were off her face, his mouth no longer against her egger lips. "The others will be here shortly."

Declan left Eden there, standing less than a yard from the desk, to stew in her own internal misery. He rounded the desk to retake his seat, picked up his book, and begin to read as though she was no longer with him in the room.

Eden stood staring at him as the thought of running from the room faded from her mind. Again, she was plagued by the thought of how unfair it was to be so close to such an exquisite man who didn't deserve her. Yet here she was, watching him with growing desire radiating through her.

Within her mind she replayed every vile thing he done to her since she entered this house. By the end, she had snuffed out that flame and in its place was a cold fury.

Minutes trickled by, turning into what felt like hours of standing, waiting for the others to return.

There came a light tapping against the bedroom door. It was only then that Declan closed his book and placed it back on the desk.

"You may enter." Declan spoke, his eyes never leaving Eden's. "It's time to celebrate."          


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