Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)

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By YearoftheAuthor

Here is part two. I split the chapter up because I haded so much to it that it was nearly 5,000 words and I didn't want anyone to think it was too long. 

Chapter 16 will be posted soon. It's a brand new chapter. 

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15

Two Girls, One Dance (part two)

When he glanced down at Eden, her eyes were lingering on his lips and he couldn't help but notice the slight upturned corner of her mouth. "As for you." He gave her wrists a firm squeeze. "You will offer me your body willingly and without modesty. I want to see your release overtake you. Understood? You aren't to look away from me."

Eden nodded.

"Say it."

"I won't look away from you."

If only Declan could will himself to press his lips against that tiny smile. It would offer his much pleasure. Her obedience made him want to allow Eden the sweet release even though she tried to disobey him earlier.

He glanced back up at Diamond. "Your time starts now."

Without hesitation, Diamond's mouth went back to Eden's breast, sucking and nipping at the bare flesh beneath her lips. She was quick to slip a hand between Eden's slightly parted thighs. Her fingers rubbed against the tender nub of nerves that was sure to bring Eden to the edge of her release. When that didn't get the response Diamond desired, she slipped two slender fingers inside Eden and proceeded to fuck her while her thumb worked her clit.

"I want you to taste her." Declan spoke this command to Diamond but he couldn't take his eyes from Eden's face.

His thumbs ran over Eden's forearms. "Open your legs and offer yourself to Diamond."

Diamond moved towards Eden's feet, but she didn't move her legs. She just stared up at Declan and bit her bottom lip.

"Do it." He leaned closer to Eden.

Red streaks trailed down Eden's chest, over her belly, to her hips. The sight of it drove him mad. Before Diamond could spread Eden's legs wider, he said, "Offer yourself to Diamond and allow her to give you a release."

Eden was a stubborn one and held her ground a moment longer before parting her legs wider, exposing her inner lips and her glistening sex, plump with her arousal.

His eyed her sex with a hungry passion. He wanted to be the one knelt between her legs, yet he couldn't allow himself that pleasure.

Diamond dipped a finger into Eden's slick moisture and dragged her finger up to Eden's clit to tease her. She wasn't in a rush to finish, and he was happy for that. It meant she knew what she was doing. Her thumbs came to rest on either side of her clitoris, trapping that little nub, and began to rub her.

The reaction was almost instantaneous.

Eden bucked her hips back, shutting her legs over Diamond's working hands and tried to sit up. "Wait it's too much." She gasped but Declan held her down.

"Stop moving." He said.

"Diamond." Eden lifted her head. "I can't do this."

Declan looked up a Diamond. "Is there a problem?"

"We just need a moment. Isn't that right, Eden?" Diamond looked at Eden with a reassuring smile that said don't fuck this up for us. "Can you do this? Declan desires to see you cum for him."

Eden's face reddened. "Yes but-"

"But what?" Declan asked from above her.

Eden looked up at him. "Are you really going to make me say it?"

"Out with it."

The look of pure humiliation on Eden's face was priceless. "What if, you know-" Her gaze shifted toward her wet bottoms.

"She's embarrassed." Diamond understood her hesitation. "It's okay if you do it again. I don't mind."

"Are you afraid you might squirt again?" The laugh that Declan gave echoed around the room and caused Eden to flush a brighter shad of mortification.

"You don't have to laugh at her. Of course, she's upset this never happened before."

"My apologies for laughing at you Eden." His hands ran over the length of her arms. "Maybe that could be part of my challenge. Make you experience that again. Would you like that? This time with no clothes to hide it."

"No." Eden clamped her legs shut. She struggled to sit up, but Declan's grip only tightened on her arms, pinning her against the overstuffed sofa.

"If you want to deny yourself that sort of pleasure so be it." He spoke slowly. "But you will not deny me a chance to experience your release."

"Do you want this, Eden?" Diamond asked.

Eden stared up at Declan. A look of worry crossed her features. She licked her lips and nodded.

"Say it. No more nodding."

There was but a meek sigh as she parted her legs and allowed them to fall wide open. "Yes, I want it."

"Are you sure?" Diamond asked.

"She said she wanted it."

Diamond sat back, challenging Declan with a glare. He didn't much care for her new-found attitude towards him.

"Stop rushing Eden to make a decision. That isn't how things work. I'm not doing anything she doesn't want done to her. Is that clear?" When Declan gave her a nod, she added, "Say it."

"Tell me Diamond. Are you a dominant?" When she only cocked up a brow, he added, "Have it your way then. Yes, I understand."

"We need her consent." She turned back towards Eden. "Do you want me to touch you Eden? Yes or no." She said with the same authoritative tone was dealt to Declan.

Eden glanced up a Declan then down at Diamond behind her closed legs. "Yes." But she didn't move.

"You're going to have to open your legs." When Eden hesitated, Diamond parted them for her. "Relax and allow yourself to enjoy it. Isn't that what you want, Declan? For Eden to enjoy herself."

He watched Diamond knead Eden's inner thighs, working her way slowly toward her sex. "More than anything." She pressed her lips against each of Eden's thighs, leaving red on her pale skin. "You good now?" She cooed against her skin.

Eden relaxed under Diamond's soft touch and allowed her thighs to fall open wider.

Diamond's thumbs returned to their spots but this time she moved slowly, applying gentle pressure. There wasn't such a jarring reaction this time. Instead, Eden relaxed under Declan's arms. It remained like this until Eden let loose her first moan, signaling she was ready for more when her hips moved with Diamond's hands.

And with that, the pressure of Diamond's thumbs returned. Eden drew back her hips again and tried to close her legs, but Diamond's hands held them in place.

"No more fighting." He said to which Eden answered with a shuddering intake of breath. Her body jerked beneath their hands. "Stop resisting."

Now it was Eden who clung to him. Her fingers pulling him closer. Another jerk of hips made him speak, "Finish her with your mouth."

Diamond leaned down and offered Eden a gentle lick. Her hand slipped from her inner thighs to under her ass and held her in place.

Declan no longer cared to watch anything but Eden's face. Her eyes. Her furrowed brow. The way her nostrils flared with each quickening breath. And finally, her quivering lips. What he wouldn't do to bite that bottom lip and taste her mouth.

He leaned over her and he swore he could feel her heated breath against his face.

Eden gasped. Declan couldn't take his eyes off of Eden's lips. He craved to feel them. Pleasure consumed her features. He watched her lips part more, eyed the tip of her tongue run along her bottom lip before she clamped it between her teeth.

Her face reddened as she held her breath and he knew she was trying to withhold any noise.

Why must she deny herself full pleasure? He wondered as she continued to struggle against her satisfaction.

"Breathe." He told her.

Eden sucked in a lungful of air and her grip tightened on his wrists. She held onto him as he did her and released a low moan of pleasure. A deep frown settled between her brows. When she closed her eyes to cry out her pleasure, he stopped her.

"Open your eyes!" Declan's voice ragged in his ears.

Eden's eyes snapped open, her gaze connecting instantly with his. Again, she arched her back in pure unadulterated bliss as she tried to catch her breath.

Declan tightened his hold on her wrists as she started to struggle. He knew she was fighting her release, trying to move away from Diamond's working mouth.

"Declan-" Another moan and it was music to his ear. Her grip returned as though she needed his permission to reach her climax. "Kiss me." She begged but when he made no move to do it, she tried again, "Please kiss me." Those three words were mangled with her shuddering breaths.

He released her arms and lowered his lips to hers in an upside-down kiss, offering what she begged for. Her mouth shook against his as she moaned. Her hands held him to her now as though she yearned for his touch.

"Give in to your release, Eden." He said. "I want to see you lose yourself."

"Yes." Her lips found his again and finally he was able to nip at her bottom lip.

He pulled away from her, to afraid he'd lose himself. Eden's hands tried to grip the backs of his arms to bring him back to her, but he didn't allow it. He pinned her arms above her head and watched her continue to fight her release.

"Now." He commanded.

Eden clung to him as her lips worked to form a single word that never came. She plunged over the cliff of orgasm, crying out louder than ever as her fingers dug into his forearms. She had lost her fight and allowed her body to succumb to her release.

Her legs quaked around Diamond's head and she bucked against her mouth. But Diamond's tongue was unrelenting against her clitoris, circling, sucking, and nipping at that sensitive spot that drove her absolutely mad with pleasure. Beneath his hands, her muscles spasmed, shaking and twitching as her hips lifted completely off the couch. She cried out her final release.

"No more! No more! No more!" Eden begged in a fit of giggles. "I can't take anymore." She moaned, breaking their connection.

Diamond slipped her hands out from under Eden's ass and smiled up at her friend. "Did you enjoy that?"

The smile on Eden's lips said it all. She gazed up at Declan with eager eyes and gave him a gentle squeeze. When her fingers loosened their grip around his arms, he released her and sat back.

"Holy shit." Eden mumbled breathlessly and glanced up at him. She reached for Declan and hand came to rest against his thigh and slid to his knee, squeezing it.

Declan wanted to take part in Eden's release, to offer her another one but this time with his cock deep inside her. He wanted to taste her body and feel her warmth clamped around him but held back is true desire.

His gaze traveled slowly over her flushed body. Bright red lipstick marked every spot Diamond mouth had claimed. Her breasts, down her chest, over her slim waist, and hip to hip. It was smeared over her inner thighs and finally over her sweet cunt.

His eyes devoured the sight of her spread nether lips. The harsh contrast of pale skin and glistening pink, spotted with red. What he wouldn't do to taste her himself and bury his face between those still twitching thighs.

"Did you enjoy the show?" Eden's slid her fingers over her sex and gave a shuddering moan. But it was the hand that still lingering on his knee drew him back to reality.

The urge to haul Eden up by her hair and force her to her knees overcame him. He imagined pinning her against the couch with his forearm pressed against the back of her neck so he could fuck her raw and make it hurt. He'd spill his seed into her and when she begged him for another release, he'd grant her an ounce of mercy and offer it only with his mouth.

The darkness seeped into his thoughts. The voices offering their insights. They wanted to hear her cry for mercy as he took her. It will make your own release all the better. Make her cry. Make her bleed. Have her beg. Fill her with your seed and make her yours. Do it now or you'll lose your chance. Claim her! Take her NOW! They shouted.

Declan's fingers shook as they trailed over Eden's delicate hand. She curled her pinky over his thumb and smiled up at him. Every minute detail was caught by his eyes. A dimple in her cheek, as one side of her mouth lifted higher than the other.

She's so beautiful. He thought. But I want her to desire the pain with the pleasure.

His need was quickly becoming a painful urge and he didn't know how long he could hold the darkness back. He needed Eden gone, to leave before he acted out his sins on her flesh.

"Gather your things and leave." The words came out strained. He sighed when her smile waned. "Tell Kelsey to book another hour with Diamond. I'll worry about the financials later."

He could barely contain himself. Don't let her leave this room. Allow us pleasure in her pain! It's been so very long since we've indulged in someone's suffering. Let us breathe and take care of her. We won't harm her too badly. Not here anyway.

To see Eden lying on the couch, flushed from pleasure was driving him mad. It was time for his release, and he would only allow himself to have it with Diamond for she had indeed won his favor.

"What?" Eden destroyed what little connection they had made by removing her hand. "You're joking, right?"

Diamond remained silent at the other end of the couch.

"You," he pointed to Diamond. "I want you undressed by the time she leaves this room." To his utter amazement there was no hesitation. Diamond began to strip on the other end of the couch, ignoring them in her haste to follow his demand.

If only Eden were like that. The thought was bitter against his tongue.

He knew Diamond would choose money over friendship. They always did. Eden allowed her emotions to reign over her choices, which he considered very foolish and unappealing. While Diamond was more like himself. Her need to close a deal was more important than feelings and he could use that to his advantage.

"Can you not obey a simple request?" Declan asked when Eden still didn't move from her spot. She only stared up at him almost in disbelief.

"What-"

"Leave!" He barked.

Eden bolted up, holding her arms across her chest as if to hide her nakedness from him. Good. Hate me. I don't care. It will keep you safe.

Her cheeks blushed a deep red. Without another word, she scooped her bra from the floor and quickly tried to re-hook it. Her nervous fingers fumbled with the clasps.

"I have no patience for you wasting my time." Declan snapped his fingers at her. "If you must flounder around then do it outside."

Once again, Eden was shown the cruel side of Declan Payne, the one that showed no mercy or compassion. The darkness had taken him over.

He would have taken a belt to Eden if he could, or maybe one of his prized whips if they were in his possession and Eden was under his care and authority. He'd chase her from the room like a master would a disobedient slave.

The thought of taking a belt to her made him that much harder.

Declan grabbed the clothes from Eden's shaking hands and kicked her shoes out of his way. He stalked towards the door, throwing everything out into the hallway.

"Leave this room." His tone was firm but laced with deep regret.

Tears glistened in Eden's eyes as she looked to Diamond for help. But she was of no help. She sat naked on the end of the couch and handed Eden her heels. "I'll see you in a bit, okay."

Eden took her heels and said nothing.

As she slipped past Declan and out into the hall, Eden met his gaze. The fire he desired to see had returned, burning bright behind her steely eyes. "You're a terrible person, you know that?"

"I know." Was all he could say before shutting the door and allowing her to escape the darkness that welled up inside him. "I know." He repeated once it was closed.

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