Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... More

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)

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By YearoftheAuthor

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Hey guys! I'm pleased to announce that this is a brand new chapter for Breaking Eden. Give it a read and let me know down below in the comments what you honestly think. Good or bad, I'll take it if it'll help improve my story.

As always, please point out any mistakes you may find while reading. Fresh eyes see everything I miss. And don't forget to vote, comment, and share to help get Breaking Eden to #1! :0)

Chapter thirteen update coming soon...

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12 - a Lesson In Punishment

Declan pinched the bridge of his nose and motioned for Ben to stand up.

Ben did so without the slightest bit of hesitation. His gaze never dared to leave the floor as he stood silently next to Declan as though waiting for his next command.

Declan strolled toward Eden. A small grin tugging at the corners of his mouth. "Your display of constant immaturity ceases to amaze me, Eden."

"I'm not the one walking around with my cock-" 

Declan's movements were quick, surprising, and caught her completely off guard.

He slapped her across the face, sending her head toward the side. "I will not tolerate any more disrespect from you. Not here in my home."

Eden stared up at Declan in stunned silence, fighting the urge to scream at him, to slap him back, to tell him he couldn't hit her like that, to say something, anything but stand there in dumbfounded silence like an idiot.

"You're learning." His grin widened into a full leer. "You don't seem to have a snappy comeback. Or am I wrong?"

Eden's eyes narrowed. "Suck my-"

Declan's slapped her again, this time harder than the last. The sting of the blow brought tears to her eyes this time. "Anything else you wish to add to that lovely sentiment?"

Eden remained silent, hand against her burning cheek. But she held her tongue even though it was itching to rip into Declan. "Ben, go to near the bed." Declan's gaze remained on Eden, knowing full Ben would listen. 

And he did. Ben moved toward the end of the bed, standing silently next to it, and waited for further instruction.

Fear set in. It settled deep in the pit of her stomach. 

What does he have planned for me? She took a hesitant step back towards the bathroom.

Declan followed her, speaking softly, explaining their situation. "Life is full of decisions. If you choose to run, you'll be punished. You don't want me to have to punish you, do you?"

Eden paused mid-step and remained silent.

"I allow you to speak and still you chose to disrespect me?" He rubbed at the inside of his palm, and took another threatening step forward, finally closing the distance between them.

She held her ground and squared her shoulders, hoping she came off fearless instead of fearful. "I will be going home tonight. That is the only choice I'm making tonight."

"Is that so?"

"Yes."

"You won't be leaving." He reached out. His sudden movement made her flinch back. "Now, I would like for you to undress."

"What?"

"I noticed you were admiring young Benjamine earlier." Eden frowned, not comprehending what Declan was saying. "He's exquisite wouldn't you agree?" Declan motioned for Ben to come forward.

Ben came to stand directly in front of Eden. Yet he still refused to look at her. His head was bent forward, eyes downcast.

"Does he need to be naked?" Eden held her hand up, blocking his nether regions once more.

Declan immediately lowered her hand and pulled her forward. "We are all adults in here, Eden. Try not to forget that."

Eden pulled her hand free from his grip. "Why are you doing this?"

Declan ignored Eden's question. "It's time to undressed. Don't be rude and keep Ben waiting."

"No." She tried to step back, but Declan's caught her hand. His grip only tightened the more she struggled.

He forced her forward, positioning her less than a foot away from Ben. "You're acting very disrespectful towards Ben right now."

"I don't ca-"

Declan slapped her.

Eden stumbled back a few steps, clutching her burning cheek. This time she gave in to her anger.

"You son of a bitch!" she went to hit him, but he was too fast.

Eden cried out when he grabbed her hair.

He ordered Ben back to the bed and proceeded to drag Eden across the room by her hair.

No amount of struggling shook him free.

Declan deposited her in front of Ben.

Ben, who hadn't seemed to notice her, finally looked up. His features set in an emotionless and vacant stare. It was as though he was merely looking through Eden and not registering that she was standing in front of him. 

Declan spoke, his tone darkening. "Apologize."

Eden cried out when his grip tightened. "Fine! I'm sorry."

"Sadly that isn't good enough."

"What else is there to say?"

"Kiss him." Declan drew her closer to Ben.

Ben's gaze shifted, landing on Eden's face, her lips.

"And if I don't?"

"Are you refusing to follow a simple request?"

Eden struggled to free her hair from Declan's grasp. When she was free, she stood on her tiptoes to kiss Ben's cheek. "There. Done."

"Did that satisfy you, Ben?"

Ben's eyes shifted toward Declan. His response was mechanical, unfeeling. "If it satisfies you then it satisfies me, Sir."

"It doesn't though, does it, Ben?" Declan's gaze traveled down Ben's slimly toned chest and abs, landing directly on his flaccid cock, nestled in downy brown hair. "Answer truthfully now. Where you truly please?"

Eden moved before Declan could get the pleasure of demanding her to kiss Ben's mouth.

She grabbed Ben face between her hand, stood on tiptoes, and kissed him full on the mouth, lingering for longer than she liked to admit. When she broke the kiss, Eden was left breathless, wondering if she just made another mistake. Would her not waiting for his command set him off? She didn't know.

"Does that please you, Sir?" She spat and finally stepped away from Ben.

Declan raised a hand.

Eden flinched back, thinking he was going to strike her again, but he stopped her.

"I'm not going to hurt you." Instead, he ran the pad of his thumb lightly across her bottom lip. "Maybe I'm wrong about you after all."

His hand slipped behind her head, drawing her forwarded. He kissed her, gently at first then with a fevered passion on his part. She felt like she was going to vomit at any moment.

When Declan broke the kiss, he released a stunned Eden. He glanced back toward Ben then down at his now erect cock. It stood ridged and ready.

"You've awoken him. Now undress and offer Ben a release."

Eden shook her head, no. "I'm not having sex with him. You can't make me."

"You will please him either with your mouth or your cunt." Declan stepped towards her. "Do I need to help you undress? It would bring me great pleasure to rip those clothes from your body." Eden shook her head, defeated.

The tears were back, and within moments her cheeks were wet.

"It's rape," Standing in front of Ben, Eden forced him to look at her, to see her and not drift back into that mechanical state. But the life was already draining from his eyes. "Please don't do this."

Ben didn't move nor did he speak a single word to her. Instead, he looked at Declan.

"Ben will be of no help to you, Eden. He'll do whatever I ask of him. Isn't that right, Ben?"

"Yes, Sir," Ben stated flatly.

Eden fought against the tears welling in her eyes but lost. A sob escaped her lips. "Why are you doing this?"

"Have it your way." Declan reached for Eden, but she slinked away. "Do not-"

"I'll do it!" Eden wailed. "Just don't fucking touch me." Her hands shook as she pulled the sweater over her head and clutched it to her bare chest.

"Give it here." Declan held out his hand. "Come on now. You weren't this unwilling to bare it all the other night."

Eden's head shot up at his words. "I wasn't being forced, Asshole." She chucked the sweater at his face.

"Now lose the rest of it." His gaze drifted down to her pants.

Eden glared at Ben. How could he not step in and put a stop to this madness? 

In a last-ditch effort, she asked, "Is this truly what you want? You'll be a rapist if you go through with this. You know that, right?"

To Eden's surprise, Ben spoke. "We have no choices here. We simply do what is required of us." But there was a sincere look of regret and sadness in his eyes.

"If he told you to kill me would you?" She asked Ben, thinking he'd say no. "Look at me and tell me you would kill me if Declan told you to."

Ben's back stiffened, and his gaze wandered back to Declan. He remained silent. Eden knew he wanted to say so much more than he was able to.

"Make him say it," Eden spoke to Declan, but her gaze never left Ben's face. He was retreating into himself again, disappearing right before her eyes. "What is wrong with you?"

Shame overtook Ben's demeanor.

"No one is being murdered tonight, Eden," Declan said. "Now off with the pants."

Eden yanked down her pants, stepped out of them, and balled them up.

"No underwear?" Declan smirked. "How trailer park of you."

"I couldn't find the pair I had, Asshole." She hurled the pants at him, noticing the bathroom door stood ajar in the background. There was a lock on the door. If she could get there, she could stop this from happening. 

"I'm going to allow Ben to fuck you."

"You mean you're going to have him rape me." Eden was quick to correct him.

Declan pulled a foil packet from his pocket and tossed it toward Ben. "Her tests haven't come back yet. In the meantime, you'll need to wear this."

Ben opened it, positioned it over the head of his cock and rolled it down the shaft.

"How would you like her?" Declan asked.

Ben took hold of Eden's hand and guided her towards the end of the bed while Declan took a seat in one of the chairs across the room to watch.

"Turn around and bend over the end of the bed."

"I'm begging you." Eden pleaded, "Please don't do this!"

Ben merely repeated his request. "Turn around and bend over the end of the bed."

When Eden still didn't move, Ben forced her to turn around, only his hands were gentle on her arms. His mouth brushed against her ear as he mumbled a quick apology. "I'm sorry."

Ben bent her over the end of the mattress.

She balled her hands into tight fists beneath her chest and willed herself not to cry.

This isn't happening.

This can't be happening.

Declan spoke from across the room. "I want you to remember this moment, Eden, when you feel the urge to disobey me. There will always be consequences with every choice you make. Everything you say and do will end with a reward or a punishment. And I will take great pleasure in offering you both."

Eden buried her face into the thick covers and let loose a pitiful sob when Ben nudged her feet apart. "You don't have to do this!" she shouted when Ben's hands trailed over her hips.

"Carry on." Declan pushed for Ben to continue. 

Without thinking anything trough, Eden made her move. As Ben pressed his erection against her sex, positioning himself at her entrance, she struck out.

Eden threw her elbow backward with as much force as she could muster up.

The blow connected with Ben's nose, breaking it, sending him stumbling back a few paces before falling on his ass.

Clutching his bleeding face, Ben howled in pain and now it was his turn to cry. 

Eden didn't hesitate.

She hurried, knowing full well her time was short and sprinted for the bathroom door. She ducked inside the room and slammed the door shut, but something blocked its path. The door had slammed down on Declan's forearm, trapping it. 

He roared out his pain and pushed against the door with all his weight, but it didn't budge. Eden pushed harder, refusing to allow him to enter the room and planted a foot at the bottom of the door. 

Suddenly Declan withdrew his arm, and the door slammed shut. Locking it, Eden leaned against the cold wood and tried to steady her heavy breathing.

Now, what are you going to do? Her gaze frantically swept the room as she wondered what her next move was going to be. It was then that she realized that she never thought she'd actually make it to the room.

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