Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... المزيد

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)

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Hey guys! I'm pleased to announce that this is a brand new chapter for Breaking Eden. Give it a read and let me know down below in the comments what you honestly think. Good or bad, I'll take it if it'll help improve my story.

As always, please point out any mistakes you may find while reading. Fresh eyes see everything I miss. And don't forget to vote, comment, and share to help get Breaking Eden to #1! :0)

Chapter five update coming soon...

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5 - A Beautiful Disaster

Eden was currently in a state of delirium. Was he offering her a few words of kindness? Or was this a game? Was any of this even real or even happening right now?

At this point, she didn't know what was real and what was false anymore.

Which one of the shimmering forms of Declan belonged to the kinder one? She squinted at him, trying to decipher the gentle from the brute but couldn't. 

Her eyelids fluttered shut. The side of her mouth lifted up the slightest bit and her speech began to slur.

"You think I'm pretty?" She laughed against his hand, her breath hot against his skin. "Yet you were a complete prick the entire night. Go figure." She leaned against the palm of his hand, enjoying the kindness behind this gentle touch. She wouldn't mind having more in this version of him.  

"You have great potential. I'll iron out the few kinks you do have and make you perfect for auction." Declan released one of her hands and brought it to his lips. He kissed the back of her hand before laying it down over her belly.

He began on the other one. His fingers worked slowly at the buckle, loosening it, making sure to do it as gently. 

"You smell nice." Eden mused against the fabric of his shirt when he leaned over her to get to the other clasp. She giggled as the fabric brushed against her cheek, tickling it. "Like honeysuckle and self-loathing." 

"I think Dr. Morrison gave you a little too much sedative." He glanced down at her, nestled up against his shirt. "You're speaking nonsense."

"I speak nothing but the truth." She stated firmly. "I know that you like me and hate me equally," Eden spoke softly, more to her self. "I hate and like you equally too. There's this odd attraction. Do you feel it? Together, we make a beautiful disaster."

"Now you're seriously talking nonsense." Declan freed her hand and brought the back of it to his lips, kissing it. "You smell of regret and bad choices."  

She gazed up at the two shimmering images that were holding her hand. "Which one of you wants to fuck me and which one of you wants to kill me? I only want to speak with the kind one right now. Bring him back to me."

"You're hallucinating." Declan lowered her hand, laying over the other one.

"No one here will harm you unless you do something unforgivable." He held her face gently between his hands.

"Are you going to kiss me now?"

"If you listen and obey what is asked of you then you will live a long and happy life here in my home. I'm a man of my word, Eden. Behave and I will fulfill your every desire. Cross me and you will suffer."

Eden remained silent for the longest time, trying to stare up at him. "If you were smart you would kill me now and be done with me." Her words came out weak as though she was contemplating her choices.

"Are you telling me you wish to die?"

"Not at all." She couldn't move even though she tried. Her body was too heavy, her limbs too weak to hold her up.

She lay there like dead weight, wanting so badly to sit up, but she couldn't. If she could, she would have held Declan's hands up against her face a little longer to savor his warmth, would have kissed the palms of his hands and asked for this gentle side of him to stay with her.

But she couldn't so she didn't.

Instead, she settled for something else entirely, a warning of what would come.

"I'm a horrible person who has done terrible things to innocent people. I am a curse that will bring you nothing but misery. Then again, maybe we were made for each other. Two terrible people who've been thrown together by fate, isn't that be ironic."   

"How philosophical of you to think that we were meant to be." Declan gripped both of her arms and hauled her up into a sitting position, but her body went slack against his.

Her head lulled to the side, then back to stare up at him.

"I will be your end." She mumbled incoherently.

                  "Eden." He slapped her gently. "Stay with me now."

Eden couldn't fight the sick rising in her throat now that she was sitting up.

Her mouth watered, filling with hot saliva. 

Her stomach heaved.

Seconds later, her throat burned, her mouth filled with vomit, and she threw up. Her sick hit the front of Declan's shirt, soaking it with a mixture of water and stomach acid.

"How do you like me now?" Eden mumbled as her eyes rolled back in her head.

Then she was falling backward. Falling back into the black waters of the dark place. Where the waves began to thrash around her. The push and pull of the current tossed her around before dragging her beneath its turbulent surface and sent her into oblivion.

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