Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... More

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)

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By YearoftheAuthor

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Hey guys! I'm pleased to announce that this is a brand new chapter for Breaking Eden. Give it a read and let me know down below in the comments what you honestly think. Good or bad, I'll take it if it'll help improve my story.

As always, please point out any mistakes you may find while reading. Fresh eyes see everything I miss. And don't forget to vote, comment, and share to help get Breaking Eden to #1! :0)

Chapter thirteen update coming soon...

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12 - Ima drowned You In That Tub

    Eden lowered her body into the steaming water and allowed herself the opportunity to relax just for a little bit before the other foot dropped.

Diamond was currently giving Eden the silent treatment from the bedroom. But Eden could hear the muttering curses. Diamond let loose in the other room while changing into her night clothes. Eden knew their friendship was in jeopardy, but she didn't much care anymore. If Diamond honestly believed that she should have allowed that man to force himself upon her person, then she didn't need her friendship any longer. Once again Eden was reminded that she could only count on herself. 

    Sucking in a lungful of air, Eden slipped beneath the soapy surface of the water and succumbed to the nothingness that waited below.

She imagined that she was at home, in her cramped apartment, just like any other night and when she surfaced Mr. Darcy would be there to keep her company. In her fantasy this night never occurred, her mind even went as far as wiping Declan clear of her memory. Only it didn't last long.

    But the night had occurred.

There wasn't a simple way to go about erasing it, no matter how badly she wished to do so. It had happened.

    Eden surfaced, gasping for fresh breath and found Diamond leaning against the bathroom counter. She glared silently down at Eden in the tub with a look of pure loathing on her face. She had changed from her evening gown and had slipped into a black tank top and red pajama pants.     

"Okay. Out with it. Let's get this over with." Eden prompted her to speak.

Diamond folded her arms across her chest, "I was having a good time. You just had to go and ruin everything didn't you?"

Eden laughed, "What was I supposed to do, Dee? The creep was feeling me up the entire night then tried to kiss me after I repeatedly told him no and to stop groping my ass. It's his own damn fault."

"You could have just rolled with it. It was just a kiss."

     "Screw you, Dee! You would have done the same." Eden sat up in the tub, exposing her breasts above the water. "And you know it."

    "That's where you're wrong. I wouldn't have done shit. Not with forty grand at stake. I would have milked that mother fucker for all that he was worth." 

"Well I'm sorry, but I'll never be that desperate for money."

Diamond rolled her eyes and turned her back to Eden, obviously annoyed. She proceeded to take her makeup off in a huff and added, "You really are a bitch, you know that? I don't know why I wasted this opportunity on you. I should have brought someone else. Anyone else would have enjoyed this night."

Her words stung Eden at her core. "What's crawled up your ass all of a sudden?"

     "You best watch that tone bitch or Ima came of over there and drowned you in that tub." Diamond rubbed furiously at her face with a makeup remover cloth. "And wipe that damn look off ya face. God, you are so fucking ungrateful." She threw the cloth down on the counter and whirled around. Angry tears were glistening in her eyes, "Eden, I brought you here to make contacts. Those people out there throw these parties every few months. You should have been flirting with them, but instead, you chose to slap one of the clubs founders? What is wrong with you?"

     "Shit." Eden leaned against the back of the tub. "I didn't know."

"Yeah. Shit. You probably cost us both more gigs and our forty grand payday with that slap."

"I'll fix it."

"Yeah? How so?"

"I'll talk to Declan. I'll make him understand it was all my doing. So don't worry. You'll get your damn money."

"It's not just about the money!"  

There was a series of raps against the bathroom door before it burst open. Neither one of the girls had time to react before Declan stormed into the room. He was disheveled and highly agitated.

Eden covered her breasts with soap suds and did her best to look innocent and small within the tub.

Declan towered in the doorway observing Eden with a look of pure contempt. He dug his thumb against the inside of his palm and continued to glare at her. 

"Hope you don't mind me using your tub," Eden said when neither him or Diamond moved to speak.

"You." Declan took a threatening step forward and pointed at her. "Out."

Eden caught Declan's gaze drift down to her breasts. She straightened her shoulders and challenged him. "I'm not finished yet."

Declan struggled to contain his fury as he charged the side of the tub. He rested a hand on either side of Eden and leaned towards her. His eyes were positively glowing with hatred, "Get out NOW!" he roared less than a foot away from her face.

Eden cowered back, refusing to listen to him at first. "Have it your way." His hands found her upper arms. He hauled her from the water and up to her feet.

"Let go of me!" she screamed and pushed against his chest. "I don't like people touching me."

When Declan forcefully tried to removed Eden from the tub, she slapped him like she had Harold Humphrey.

"You are starting to really piss me off; you know that?" Declan finally released her and Eden hurried to steady her stance; afraid that at any moment Declan might strike her back.

But he didn't. He stood in front of her, panting for air.

"I don't think you realize what you've done, Eden. And you." He turned toward Diamond. "It's urgent that I speak with you right away."

"Sure." Diamond spoke quietly, staring between Declan and a dripping Eden.

"Alone." Declan added before heading out of the room. 

Diamond gave Eden an aggravated glare that cut her to her core. If Declan wouldn't talk to Eden, then she couldn't explain herself.

Eden mouthed the words, "I'm sorry." Before a very distraught Diamond left the room.

Diamond closed the door behind her, leaving Eden standing alone and dripping in the tub.

It only took Eden a moment longer to sink back into the soothing water. She settled back against the tub and took another deep breath then slipped underneath the surface of the water and screamed out her true feelings.

When her lungs started to throb for another breath, she resurfaced to find that she was still alone, still in the tub, and still in Declan's mansion.

Only now Eden needed to think of a way to convince Declan that Diamond had nothing to do with her actions against that disgusting man Harold Humphrey. She'd cut her loses on her forty grand payday, but she needed to make sure Diamond got her. That was the only way she knew how to fix things.  

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