Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

By YearoftheAuthor

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... More

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)

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By YearoftheAuthor

Video: Ki: Theory - Stand By Me

(The road only it's night)

As always, feel free to RIP this book apart by pointing out how I can fix it and don't forget to tell me what you like. Don't worry, you aren't going to hurt my feelings. I eventually want to publish this book so I'd rather have it ripped apart now, when I can actually fix things, then publish it and get ripped apart on Goodreads and Amazon. You know how it is. So do the thing and I hope you enjoy my story. :0) ________________________________________________________________________________

Part One: The Ghost Girl

1

February 2017 - 11 p.m.

Officer Hamlin couldn't decide what was worse, the hunger eating away at his stomach, or the migraine pounding in his temple. His gaze wavered from the rain-soaked highway and drifted toward the sandwich sitting atop his workbag. As if on cue, his stomach grumbled. He let loose an acid-filled belch that seared his throat and brought tears to his sleep-deprived eyes.

Drumming his fingers against the steering wheel, Hamlin made up his mind.

A hot meal would have been ideal on this frigid night, but he brushed the thought aside and snagged the sandwich off his bag. He struggled to peel back the foil with one hand before taking a massive bite. A glob of mustard oozed out. It dripped down the side of his hand and spattered onto the leg of his black uniform.

"Goddammit." He swiped at it, smearing yellow deeper into the fabric and let loose another string of curses.

His head shot up from his lap just in time to spot something staggering out of the trees. The pale form headed right into the path of his speeding patrol car. Hamlin dropped the sandwich. Bread and deli meat fell into his lap as he screamed. "Son of a bitch!"

He slammed his foot against the brake and jerked the steering wheel to the left, narrowly missing the thing in the road.

Then chaos erupted.

The patrol car skidded over the asphalt, its head lights cutting through the darkness. It managed a 160 degree turn before slamming into the trees lining the opposite side of the road. The passenger side crumpled, and the windows exploded on impact.

Hamlin had just enough time to cover his head as shards of glass pelted his raised arms.

Everything was quiet. Too quiet.

Lighting illuminated the darkness. Moments later, thunder cracked overhead. The clouds opened up and released a torrent of unrelenting rage.

In the end, the only sounds were of rain against metal and Hamlin's labored breathing.

The windshield wipers came to a stop, making it nearly impossible to see past the flooded glass. He squinted into the darkness, trying unsuccessfully to make sense of everything beyond the muddled headlights then he fell back against his seat in frustration.

Get a hold of yourself, old man. Your Goddamn eyes are playing tricks on ya. Ain't nothin' out there but you and the road. Nothin' to be afraid of. He rubbed his hands over his face and sighed. And whatever the hell that thing was.

A flash of white skin and dark hair dashed briefly through the beams of dim light. This time he did see it. He saw all of it.

His high-pitched cry echoed into the night. "Oh, dear God! What the fuck is going on?"

With shaking hands, officer Hamlin drew his gun and squinted out into the darkness. He almost dared that thing to show itself again.

But nothing came.

There was only rainfall, the car, and a terrified old man who was one-year shy of retiring unless he dropped dead of a heart attack tonight. He scanned the road with narrowed eyes, then turned toward the gaping passenger side windows.

Inky black stared back at him.

Where are you? A creeping tightness grew in his chest. All clear.

He fumbled blindly for the handset radio and brought it to his mouth.

Licking his lips, he tried to steady his breathing.

"This is officer Hamlin. I got a bit of a situation here." He considered requesting a new pair of pants since he'd just about shit himself but didn't. There was a long stretch of static then a husky voice filled the silence.

"Hit another deer, Hamlin?" The woman drew out his name, laughing.

"No Doris, I didn't hit another deer." He mimicked her thick Boston accent almost perfectly.

"Ya got to work on them sounds a little, Asshole." She rebuffed. "What's ya position? I'll see if we can get someone out to collect ya."

"I'm on the corner of who gives a shit and I don't fuckin' know." He tried to recall the last sign he passed on the highway but for the life of him he couldn't. Was it Riverton or Cadence?

"You kiss ya wife with that filthy mouth?"

"I'd kiss her every Goddamn night if I could. God rest her soul."

"Christ, Hamlin." A momentary silence settled between the two. "How long?"

Hamlin cleared his throat before pressing the button to speak. "Been almost a year now."

In four days, at exactly 6:34 am, it'd be one full year since she left me. And no, the pain never stops. It's there when I wake up and there when I go to sleep.

In the end, Hamlin's wife was bed bound and delirious, pumped full of enough drugs to kill a horse, yet barely enough to ease her pain during those final days. Cancer was a bitch like that. It eroded flesh and bone, leaving nothing but death and decay in its wake. It knew nothing of race or gender because, to it, everyone was enough.

"Are ya still there Hamlin?"

He dragged the back of an old, sun spotted hand across his cheeks and cleared his throat.

"Yeah, I'm here." He sighed. "Anyway, I'm a little outside of Cadence, I think. Maybe ten miles. Somethin' came outta the trees. I swerved to miss it, but I must have hit an oil patch because I skidded into-"

Something slammed into his door, rocking the car against the trees.

"Holy shit!" A hot circle of urine spread through the front of his pants.

"Hamlin! What happened? What's the matta?" Doris' voice hardened. "Ya answer me God dammit. Ya answer me right now!"

Hamlin's eyes widened at the sight of the pale being outside his window. His heart pounded as he tried to catch his breath. Breathe ya old son of a bitch. Breathe or you're gonna die on this road!

He brought the radio to his mouth, his voice hoarse as he gasped for air.

"Doris. I'm gonna need an ambulance." He rubbed his tightening chest and squeezed his eyes shut as pain racked his body. "Make that two. I think I'm havin' a heart attack."

He struggled to breathe through the pain. The radio slipped from his tingling fingers and fell against his thigh before slipping to the floor.

The pale form stood outside his door, staring at him.

It was a woman. A naked one at that, with feral eyes and matted, rain-soaked hair. Her dirty hands pressed against the glass.

She tried to speak. Her quivering lips worked to form words that would never come. Instead, when she opened her mouth, a scream filled the silence.   

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