Breaking Eden - (rough draft)

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[Highest rank in Mystery/Thriller #2 on 8/7/2018!] Wattpad's most twisted and disturbing book. A must read! ... Mai multe

Breaking Eden is being finished!
Book Information
Welcome to Year of the Author
Chapter List/Word Counts
Author's Note
Part One: The Ghost Girl
1- Officer Hamlin (4/20/2019 Edit)
2 - The Ghost Girl (4/20/2019 edited)
3 - Almost 4 Weeks Later (4/20/2019 Edit)
4 - Behind the White Curtain (4/20/2019 Edit)
5 - I'm Nobody! Who Are You? (4/20/2019 Edit)
6 - Remember The Past (4/20/2019 Edit)
7 - The Promise (4/20/2019 edit)
8 - The Peace Within Darkness (4/20/2019)
9 - In Limbo (4/21/2019 edit)
10 - The Pen (4/21/19 Edit)
11 - Choices (4/21/19 edit)
12 - Eden begins... (4/21/19)
Part two: When Declan met Eden
1 - Welcome to Harvey's (2/7/2021 update)
2 - A Brief History of Harvey's Burlesque Theater (2/7/2021 update)
(Bonus Chapter) Eden's Dance (2/11/2021 update)
3 - An Introduction to Declan Payne (2/17/2021 Update)
(Bonus Chapter) A Diamond In The Rough (2/17/2021 Update)
4 - Harvey Cuts A Deal (2/17/2021 Update)
5 - Diamonds are a Girls Best Friend (2/18/2021 Update)
6 - Harvey Puts His Foot Down (2/18/2021 New chapter)
7 - Their First Meeting... (2/23/2021 update)
8 - Declan Needs A Release (3/4/2021 update)
9 - Follow The Leader (3/14/2019 update)
10 - Red Right Hand (3/16/2019 Edited)
11 - The Grind (New Chapter 3/14/2019)
12 - The Darkness (New Chapter 3/16/2019)
13 - The Light Within Darkness (3/17/2019 New chapter)
14 - Declan's Fantasy (3/17/2019 NewChapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Hurt Feelings (New Content 3/23/2019)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 1) (3/23/2019 New Content)
15 - Two Girls, One Dance (Part 2) (2/23/2019 New Content)
17- A Peek Into The Past (3/30/19 New Content)
18 - Silver Lining (3/30/2019 New Chapter)
19 - The Job Offer (3/30/2019 New Content)
Part Three: The Kidnapping of Eden Burrows
1 - Arriving In Style (7/12/18 update)
2 - The Fourth Knock (7/13/18 update)
3 - Stranger Things To Come (7/14/2018 update)
4 - D is fo Dominatrix (7/16/18 update)
5 - How Eden Got Her Groove Back (7/17/18 update)
6 - Little Truths (7/18/18 update)
7 - Where Did Declan Go? (7/19/18 update)
8 - We Got to Get Out Of This Place (7/20/18 update)
9 - Ballroom Boredom (7/21/18 update)
10 - An Introduction to Harold Humphrey (7/22/18 Update)
11 - The Slap Heard Around The World (7/23/18 New Chapter)
12 - Ima Drowned You In That Tub (7/23/18 New Chapter)
13 - Diamond Cuts A Deal (7/23/18 New Chapter)
(Bonus Chapter) Choose Your Own Kidnapping
Option #1 - Rude Awakenings (7/25/18 New Chapter)
Option #2 - The Next Morning (7/26/18 New Chapter)
Option #3 - After Thoughts (7/27/2018 New Chapter)
Part 4: The Doctor Is In
1 - The Dark Place (4/13/19 Edited)
2 - Liars and Questions and Tests, Oh My! (8/2/18 New Chapter)
3 - Blood Letting (8/4/18 New Chapter)
4 - Declan's Examination (8/5/18 New Chapter)
5 - A Beautiful Disaster (8/6/2018 New Chapter)
6 - Eden's High Escape (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
7 - Eden's New Room (8/7/2018 New Chapter)
8 - Declan's Arrival (8/11/2018 New Chapter)
9 - The Painted Woman (8/21/2018 New Chapter)
10 - Welcome To The Family (8/23/18 New Chapter)
11 - Last Night Visitors (New Chapter)
12 - A Lesson In Punishment (New Chapter)
13 - Breaking Free (New Chapter)
14 - Declan Saves The Day (Bonus Chapter)
Part Five: Medical Ward Round Two
1 - Back So Soon? (New Chapter 9/7/2018)
2 - Here Today, Gone Tomorrow (New Chapter 9/8/2018)
3 - Rewards and Punishment (9/8/2018 New Chapter)
4 - The Next Morning ( New Chapter 9/8/2018)
5 - Declan's Last Nerve (9/9/2018 Bonus Chapter)
6 - The Contract
Part Six: The Rules
1 - Refusing To Eat (9/14/2018 New Chapter)
2 - Fifth Day with no Food (not edited)
3 - Rules are made to be broken (not edited)
4 - The Contract part two (not edited)
5 - 8:59 pm that night (not edited)
6 - Introduction to Phase One (not edited)
7 - The Past That Haunts (not edited)
Part Seven: Training Days
1 - Eden's First Lesson (not edited)
2- Declan Comes Home Early (not edited)
3 - Dance For Me (not edited)
NANOWRIMO
4 - In The Bathroom (not edited)
5 - A Lesson With Darius (not edited)
6 - Declan Cleans Eden Up (not edited)
Part Eight: Finders Keepers
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 1 (not edited)
1 - The Stepford Slaves Part 2 (not edited)
2 - The Master of Foxhounds (not edited)
3 - Into The Garden (not edited)
4 - The Stables and The Pitchfork (Not Edited)
5 - Jude in the Bedroom (not edited)
6 - A Close Call (not edited)
7 - After The Rose Garden (not edited)
8 - The Secret Affair (not edited)
9 - The Winner Takes All (not edited)
10 - We Got Ourselves a Winner (not edited)
Part Nine: Eden's Punishment
1 - Blood for Blood (part 1) (Not Edited)
2 - Blood For Blood (Part 2) (Not Edited)
3 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 1) (Not Edited)
4 - The Black Rose Flogger (Part 2) (Not Edited)
5 - The Oil of The Beast (Part 1) (Not Edited)
6 - The Oil of the Beast (Part 2) (Not Edited)
Part Ten: 30 Days of Solitary
1 - Day One (Not Edited)
2 - The Magic Trick (Not Edited)
3 - Back In The Closet (Unedited)
4 - You Gotta Wake Up the Beast (Unedited)
5 - Day four/Ben's Visit (Unedited)
6 - The Act of Manipulation (Part One)(unedited)
7 - The Act of Manipulation (Part Two) (Unedited)
8 - Day seven/ Ben's story (Unedited)
9 - The Bet (Unedited)
10 - A Simple Plan (Unedited)
11 - The Truth Comes Out (Unedited)
12 - Day fourteen (Unedited)
13 - The Test (Unedited)
14 - Sofia's Story (Unedited)
15 - Back in the closet still day 14 (Declan's POV) (not edited)
16 - Day 20/Where is Ben? (unedited 9/2/20)
17 - Day 21/The Letter (unedited 9/2/20)
18 - Day 25/nighttime (unedited 9/2/20)
19 - Day 30/One Day more (unedited)
Part Eleven: The Pleasure in Payne
1 - Ben's Punishment
2 - Ben's Reward (not Edited)
3 - Eden's First Orgasm
4 - A Fight Between Enemies (unedited)
5 - A contract and a submittal (unedited)
6 - A study of pain and pleasure (unedited)
7 - A Deeper Connection (unedited)
8 - The Next Morning (unedited)
9 - Therapy for the Wicked (Not Edited)
10 - One Hand. One mouth. (Unedited)
Part Twelve: Obedience Training
1 - The Chair (unedited 9/24/20)
FAN ART CENTRAL
Final Author's Note
What would you like to see happen?
Sound Track

16 - Declan's Release (3/24/2019 New Chapter)

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Here is a fresh new chapter. I wanted to got more into detail into with Declan's time alone with Diamond. That being said, this hasn't been edited. It's purely a raw first draft that I might need to expand on later to add more meat to it. 

As always, feel free to rip this story apart. Tell me what you like and what you don't like. Extra points if you offer a way you think it can be improved. I'm all ears for reader feedback as long as it's helpful and honest. 

Chapter 17 coming soon! 

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16

Declan's Release

"Come here." Declan motioned Diamond forward as his hand worked at his belt buckle. "On your knees and crawl."

She slipped from the couch without the slightest bit of hesitation and crawled toward him. Her full breasts hung beneath her, swaying with her movements.

"Now tell me, Diamond." He slowly slid the belt free of his pants. "Do you desire pain, or do you desire giving it?"

"If you're asking if I'm a dominant, the answer is yes." She stopped in front of his feet and lean back on her knees. "And if you're asking if I'm a submissive then the answer is still yes."

"A switch." The side of his mouth twitched up. "It's been a while since I've had one of those."

"Which would you like me to be?"

"That depends. Do you enjoy pain?"

"Yes."

That word sent a bolt of agonizing pleasure through his cock.

"Stand up." Declan unbuttoned his pants as she stood and drew down the zipper. "I want you to please me." He pulled her onto his lap.

There was no fight or resistance. She simply caved to his needs. Her willingness to comply without so much as an ounce of hesitation pleased him immensely.

What an obedient one you are. He mused and brought Diamond's glistening fingertips to his lips. One by one, he ran his tongue up its length and delighted in Eden's essence.

"How does she taste?" Diamond settled onto his lap by sliding her legs around him to straddle his hips.

"Divine." He trailed his fingertips along Diamond's jaw. "I wish to taste her on your tongue." He smashed his mouth against her lips.

Her hand dropped to his cock, pulling back his underwear to free it and began to stroke him.

But all Declan could think about was Eden. She bogged down his memories with every tiny detail.

The way her mouth pressed against his after she had begged him to kiss her. Soft but yielding under his fevered touch. To how her fingers then curled over the backs of his arms, as though she wanted to hold him that much closer. The feel of her cheek underneath his fingertips as he tilted her head back the slightest bit to meet his eager mouth. Then the beautiful sound of her moans against his ear as she leaned her cheek against his.

That moment would last an eternity.

His memories drifted to her eyes. Flecks of gold mixed with brown. No, they were blue with flecks of green, making them look almost hazel. How when she smiled up at him the corners of her eyes crinkled. The way she looked at him with burning need in those final moments as she fought a war against her release.

He wished so badly that the woman on his lap, stroking his cock and kissing him, were Eden. But when he opened his eyes it was Diamond staring back at him.

Brown eyes and skin. Full lips that fit so well against his. She would do just fine.

His gaze dropped to her breasts. Dark areolas tipped with pierced nipples. A flicker of desire fired through him.

"I want to punish you." Her hand stopped mid stroke.

"With that?" She pointed at the belt gripped in his hand.

He brought it up between them, trailing it over her chest. "It would please me greatly to feel it land across your skin."

"I have conditions."

"Name them."

"You won't hit hard enough to draw blood."

"Understandable."

"And only on my ass and thighs." She added.

"Anything else before we start?"

She grew quiet as her fingers ran over the belt.

"I didn't peg you as the shy type like Eden. What's your last request. Out with it."

"When you fuck me-"

"Getting down to the nitty gritty, are we?" He laughed when she raised a brow at him. "Continue."

"When you fuck me, I want you to put this around my neck and choke me." She said. "But not enough to make me pass out. Just enough to make it so you have complete control over how and when I breathe."

"Deal." He kissed her. Only this time it was quick, as though the meeting of their lips was nothing more than a hand shake of agreement.

"How do you want me?"

"Over there." He motioned to the other end of couch with the belt. "On your knees with your ass in the air and your cheek pressed against the fabric."

She moved from his lap and went to the other end of the couch.

"Lift your hips higher and arch your back so I can see that cunt of yours." She did as she was told. He trailed the belt up the back of her thigh. "Now lace your fingers behind your neck."

"Like this?" She asked as she moved her hands to the back of her neck.

He brought the belt down over the backs of her thighs. "No talking."

Declan began to warm her up, teasing her skin with light passes. "Are you ready?"

"Yes."

He brought the belt down over her thighs with a quick snap.

"One." Diamond spoke the word with pride.

Another blow, this time a little harder landed over her ass.

"Two."

He brought the belt down over her thighs. This blow made her hiss and it was music to his ears.

"Count." He ordered when she didn't speak.

"Three." The pride wavered the tiniest bit.

He pushed the limits and brought the belt down harder. Her ass clenched as she sucked in a breath.

"Four." She breathed.

The darkness crept in, clawing at the corners of his mind and fought to gain control.

He brought the belt down again.

"Five." Diamond's glistening cunt was plump with desire.

The darkness settled in his mind and he was ready to take it a step further.

"Enough counting." His vision wavered.

Diamond's image glitched in front of him. When she looked back at him it wasn't her face. He blinked and she disappeared. He shook his head to clear it, but nothing worked. The image before him was what he wanted most.

Eden. Her name was smooth against his tongue.

She knelt in Diamond's spot with her ass high in the air. Crisscrossing red welts marked her skin. The sight was positively beautiful. She moved, turned to face him. Her lips curled up. "Do it again." She wiggled her hips. "I love the feel of leather on my skin."

He brought the belt down over her thighs.

"More." She moaned. "Do it harder. Make it hurt."

"Stop talking." He said and brought the belt down again in three rapid blows across her legs. "I will do as I please."

Declan stepped behind her and ran the tips of his fingers over Eden's heated flesh. The welts stood out. He chose to use his palm on her. He smacked her ass. The sound of skin against skin pulled him into another hard smack across her other cheek.

His hand came to rest over her sex, but he didn't move to please her. Instead, he just held her there, feeling the rush of her pulse against his palm.

"I could take you like this." She responded by rubbing herself against his hand. "Would you like that?" Her movement stopped.

She turned her head to face him. "A real man wouldn't ask. He would take what he desired."

"Face forward." His hand gave her sex a hearty slap.

Her hand snaked between her thighs and covered his. She pressed his fingers against her and rocked her hips.

"Fuck me." She moaned into the couch. "And make it hurt."

He slipped a finger into her vagina and then another. "You would like that wouldn't you? I knew you would enjoy the pleasure in pain."

He jammed in a third finger deep inside her, stretching her unbelievably wide. She cried out at the sudden and forceful intrusion, falling forward onto her stomach and away from his fingers. Eden clamped her hand over her sex and rolled to her side. "How could you?" She whimpered up at him. Her eyes were filled with tears.

There was blood on her fingertips. When he rushed forward to help her, the blood had disappeared, as though it were never there. She brought her fingers to her lips and licked them.

He reached out to comfort her, but she slapped him away. "Got you good, didn't I?" She laughed. "And you were so worry."

He grabbed her and hauled her up from the couch. "Stop this right now."

"You're pathetic, Declan. Always have been. Always will be." Her laugh echoed in his mind.

"I thought I hurt you." He mumbled.

"Hurt me?" Another scornful laugh. "You thought you could hurt me! That's funny seeing as I'm a figment of your sick imagination. You're starting to lose your mind."

"Stop laughing." He picked up the belt and shook with rage.

"Tell me, Declan." Eden touched herself again and this time brought her finger to his lips, rubbing his bottom lip. "What would you do to the real Eden?"

"I'd fuck her." His eyes went back to the pink lips between Eden's thighs. "I'd make her beg me to stop."

"Please, you couldn't fuck your way out of a paper bag."

He brought the belt down again and again. The blows were unrelenting and staggers over her body. Her breasts. Her belly. Her back. Her legs. No spot of available flesh was safe. He was merciless as the darkness took hold of him.

But Eden didn't even flinch. Instead, her laugh only grew louder. It echoed inside his head.

"You don't know what you're talking about." He panted.

Eden sat up to face him. His gaze danced over her body. Her small breasts that would fit almost perfectly in his palm. Up to her lips as they curled into a grin meant only for him. Her eyes never left his.

"I know very well what I'm talking about." She said. "You couldn't even bring yourself to touch me. You made me beg for a kiss."

"I was protecting you."

"From what?" Her smiled faded. "Your limp cock?"

"Shut up." He raised the belt high into the air, but she offered him no reaction.

" Do you want to fuck me Declan?" Her hand went to her sex. "Put your cock in my wet pussy."

"It isn't flattering to use such crude language." But his gaze dropped to her moving fingers.

"Or do you want to put it in my mouth?" She licked her wet finger tips.

"You want my cock?" He yanked his pants down and put the belt around her head. With a firm yank, the loop tightened around her neck. "Now get on your knees."

She called his bluff. "Make me."

He wrapped the loose end of the belt around his knuckles and jerked her to him. "Listen to my demands or I will punish you. Understood?"

When Eden didn't move, he squeezed the back of her neck and forced her cheek against the couch.

"You want my cock, don't you?" He knocked her legs apart and jammed his erection into her.

Eden didn't resist. If anything, she arched her back and tilted her hips up further to allow him full access as he pounded into her. The air filled with his primal grunts as his pace quickened. But Eden, she remained silent beneath him. The sweet sound of skin slapping against skin echoed in his ears and the slight sting of his balls hitting her ass sent lightning bolts of agonizing pleasure racing through him.

"You want my cock." He slammed into her again, getting close to his release. "You want it." His hand tightened around the belt. "Say you want it."

"I-" Eden's lips moved but it was Diamond's voice he heard answer him. "I want it."

He pulled out of her cunt and pressed right into her ass. Three pumps later, he came. He fell against her back, still thrusting the last of his orgasm into her.

It wasn't Eden. His cock slipped from Diamond's ass.

She was panting just like him. As he showered her shoulder with little kisses, Declan wondered if he could settle on claiming Diamond instead. Breaking her would be easy. There would be no fight or struggle and that was how he preferred it.

But his drifted back to Eden. The way she looked beneath him. The way she smiled. How her hands felt against his arms. And finally, how her lips felt against his. He couldn't deny the odd connection between them.

He made up his mind. Why have one when you can have two?

He smiled against her skin. "I have a proposition for you."  

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