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《Maria》 With Love - Andita OS

Reviewer- marshaa1306

"With Love - Andita OS" Story by Harshita__180103

First of all, I am terribly sorry that this review did not come out earlier. It has been sitting in my drive and I had just forgotten to submit it. Without further ado, let's go through the main points:

Title/Cover - 10/10
The cover of this collection has such a soft, romantic feeling. It makes me want to curl up with a fuzzy blanket and a cup of tea and dive into the one-shots. Really nice job!
The title of the collection also goes perfectly with the cover and the content of the one-shots themselves.

Blurb - 10/10
I actually really like the blurb you've written because it gives the basic background for all of the one-shots and also presents the collection to the reader. It is the ideal introduction to a collection of one-shots.

First few chapters/Exposition - 9/10
So, for this critique point, part of your introduction to the characters comes from the blurb and part of it comes from various one-shots from the collection. I think that you've done a beautiful job with describing your characters and their relationships. The only thing I would say to do is perhaps make the setting more clear since I'm pretty sure the story takes place in India but it's not 100% clear.

Plot - 19/20
Every one-shot I read was very well written and had its own short storyline which could stand on its own. I thought that each one-shot was moving and had its own special element so none of them blended together. The one thing that I would say to improve on a little bit is defining what is going on in the story. So, just clarify some of the events that are happening so it is absolutely clear what is going on because in a few one-shots I'm not fully sure what is going on.

Pace - 8/10
The pacing in the one-shots is pretty good for most of them. There are a few that need a bit of a boost, though, because they are pretty slow. So, just read things over again and consider what could make some moments more emotional. It's crucial that you do this correctly since you have so little words to work with in the one-shot.

Grammar, Punctuation, Syntax & Diction - 10/10
The grammar in this story is just immaculate which I don't see very often, especially on Wattpad. It makes your story so much easier and more pleasing to read. So, great job on this one!

Characters - 15/15
Bondita: She is so supportive, loyal, and loving. Her emotions just radiate off the page and they're so raw. I simply love it because she's described so well.
Andirudh: He is very strong-willed and brash but he definitely has a soft spot for Bondita which is sweet.

Overall Enjoyment - 14/15
To be honest, I probably would have never considered reading a collection like this because it's different from what I normally read. That being said, this collection really impressed me with its masterfully written one-shots and heart-throbbing storylines. Fantastic work; keep it up!

Total Score: 95/100