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《Via》I Love You

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

I Love You by girlwithnoinnocence

Wow, you really are a fan of my reviews aren’t you girlwithnoinnocence seeing as you’ve asked me to review all the books you’ve written so far, so thank you for asking me to review them!

Cover:
Simple, yet effective. I also love the little line “I’ll give you more time, tell me a better joke”, which I’m guessing is a line from the book, I like that you chose this because it looks almost as if he’s actually waiting for that person to actually tell a better joke or something.

Description:
I think maybe you should try writing a longer blurb or to maybe use a different line from the book as you’ve already used that line in the cover, this is just a suggestion though so don’t take me to seriously on this, but that one line is still pretty good.

Storyline:
The story is about Y/n having a crush on Jungkook who’s dating another girl called Aerin who’s cheating on him with another guy but even though you tell Jungkook he doesn’t believe you even though you tell him so many times, and even worse is that the results of your CT scan isn’t good news. I instantly knew she was gonna die when I saw the line “I don’t have much time”, for a short story, you managed to get in every detail and not miss any out. I do have to say though, if he still doesn’t believe her even though she’s got proof, then wow just wow.

Characters:
Y/n is a good friend, she’s just looking out for Jungkook and doesn’t want him to get played, I like that she also doesn’t give up as well such as when he started ignoring her and won’t talk to her she just found a solution to it by putting notes into his locker. Like Y/n says Jin is the mum of the group in your story and is a very comforting person as whenever Y/n is upset he always cheers her up. Jungkook in your story is pretty oblivious to the fact that Y/n had a crush on him, before he started dating Aerin, he and Y/n were very close and were good friends but once he started dating Aerin things changed and they grew distant and despite Y/n telling him that his girlfriend was cheating on him he wouldn’t be believe Y/n until she had photographic proof, despite not being told about Aerin, it’s clear that she doesn’t love Jungkook otherwise she wouldn’t have cheated on him.

Grammar/Spelling:
There were just 2 small mistakes, the first one was in the first chapter where the name “Aerin” is missing a ‘n’ at the end, the other one was in the last chapter in the line, “As don’t have much time left with me”, I think the line would be better rewritten to become, “ As I don’t have much time left”, other than that there won’t any other mistakes.

Engagement of the reader:
Well I’m a big fan of sad stories so this story was pretty engaging to me as the story was a favourite genre of mine, I don’t know if you realise this but you are really good at writing sad stories, you manage to get the language and the emotions right.