Naruto OC reviews

OC 123 (Sayomi Senju)

Finally back making them Naruto OC reviews. I can't wait to start this again though once it gets to 200 that truly will be the end unless you know, popular demand. Well this OC is by Milo_Uchiha thank you for being the first OC back in here. I highly recommend giving her story a look as I will be doing the same. Now without further ado, let's get started.
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This is a Naruto OC:

Her name is Sayomi Senju.

Age: She starts out at 6, currently she is seven.

Ok so the story starts off in her past. That's cool.

Family: She has too much family, UGHHH. Hachiro Senju(Older Brother. Deceased.), Hana Uchiha (Mother. Deceased), Tobirama Senju(Father. Alive.), Hiroshito Senju(First cousin. Alive, I'm going to kill him off soon,), Hashirama Senju(Uncle on dads side. Alive.), Mito Uzumaki (Aunt on dads side. Alive), Madara Uchiha(Uncle on moms side. Alive.), Izuna Uchiha (Uncle on moms side. Alive.)

Ok I will come out and say this. This is to powerful of a family to start off with. You have a dad that hates the uchiha, 2 hokages as family, and 2 very powerful uchihas on your mom side. You will need to cut this list down if you have to have one than please pick one and not 4.

Appearance:

That's what she looks like when she is 18. When she is 18, she has fierce battle scars on her back due to torture. She is a slim and tall figure at 5 feet 6 inches. She is 110 pounds. Her figure is quite skeleton-like due to her heart disease, like Itachi. When she is like 6: She has shorter hair then that, like till her shoulder. She has tinier battle marks on her cheeks. She is 40 pounds. She is a smaller figure in general, height is 3 feet 4 inches.

So she is much skinnier than that, she has been through torture, we'll see why in the past later on, and she does have a heart disease like Itachi. However I am afraid I will have to call you false on the disease. Itachi didn't have a heart disease, he had a respiratory disease. His lungs was the problem not his heart. The rest of this is ok.

Personality: Emotionless. Disgusting. Spoilt. Dangerous. All words that the village sees her as. Though she puts up a stone mask front (like Tobirama), every word hits her deeply. In reality, she's fragile and sensitive. She's quiet and helpful but is scared to do so. Scared because of what the village will think of her. So instead of showing her true, conflicted feelings, she puts up a stone wall between her and the rest of society. In this story she is also just a generally sad person. She is mourning her brother, mother, and cousin, the people that made her sane.

Just because the village describes her like that doesn't mean she is like that. That's more information for the end so you should focus more on her main personality. Next you say she is conflicted and hides her true feelings but what are these feelings? What kind of person is she really? What you described in the beginning was someone else's perspective of her but me as a person who is gonna read this story needs to know how she really is. More detail needs to be added. Plus I hope to see why they call her that because so far we have no reasons.