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🌹REVIEWER: Pooja [CLOSED] 🌹
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🌹REVIEWER: Romana [CLOSED] 🌹
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《June》Bernadette, Wife For A Year
《June》Silent Heir
《Maria》King's Love
《Maria》Arranged to Him
《Kiara》The Downside of a Wedding
《Borb》Sageo: A Death Saga
《Borb》Hurts to be Risa
《Kiara》Bits 'N' Pieces
《Maria》SAGEO: A Death Saga
《Maria》The Royal Maid
《Blade》Not Your Pretty Boy
《Sam》The Girl Who Was Afraid
《Blade》Table Talk
《Pavana》Confession: Rejected
《Rowan》James Knight: Teenage Superhuman
《Kiara》Four Dates and Tons of Insecurities
《Maria》An Earthly Restoration
《Maria》Perfect Imperfections
《Pavana》Masquerade
《June》Hugs & Kisses
《Borb》Rise of the Night Witch
《Borb》Silent Past
《Blazé》You Belong to Me
《Maria》No Escape from Reality
《Blade》Deals
《June》The Patel Bahus
《Blazé》Peiskos-Enjoying His Warmth
《Blade》Graveskies
《Blade》Like Romeo and Juliet
《Nihwé》Trust Me
《June》Love Beyond Universes
《June》Tethered Destinies
《June》Perfectly Stolen
《Nihwé》The Inception of Doom
《Pavana》Boundless
《Blade》My Mate is a Greek God
《Blazé》Him
《Rowan》Yesterday
《Blade》PACTS
《Blade》Different
《Borb》Her Lost Dimension
《Maria》Twisted Ways
《Blade》Patient 39
《Sam》A Whole New World
《June》Solus Snippets
《Blade》World of 39
《Maria》No Mercy
《Blazé》Rise of the Scoundrel
《Maria》Grey Testament
《Blade》Keeper of Demonic Forces
《Blazé》Meant to Be
《Blazé》Thoughts Turned into Tokens of Beauty
《Kailyn》The Fall of Dralia
《Claire》His Loving Eyes
《Blade》Boy x Cat
《Borb》Reveal
《Blade》US. TOGETHER. ALONE.
《Maria》Sailing to the Cursed Destiny
《Borb》Black and White
《Sam》Creature of Creation
《Blazé》Among the Fallen
《Kailyn》Mademoiselle Noir
《Blade》Wings
《Blazé》Extortioner
《Sadie》The Chronicles of Annora
《Yasmin》Greed
《Blade》Burning Free
《Blade》Drunken Life, Dreamy Death
《Blade》Bottles - Hearts
《Sadie》Of Sun and Nightmares
《Blade》Hell is an Empty Heart
《Blazé》Born
《Kailyn》Agent X
《Kailyn》Boundless
《Kailyn》Games of Love
《Sadie》Mirrored in Her
《Yasmin》The Irregular at Magic School
《Blade》The Mystery Power
🌹DECEMBER HIGHLIGHTS🌹
《Borb》Agent X
《Sadie》Moral Coding
《Yasmin》Nightmare Assassins
《Blade》Worth the Fame
《Yasmin》Fallen Wolf
《Blade》The Colour of Second Chances
《Sadie》All The Swans Are Closer
《Yasmin》Tale of the Princess
《Zetya》The Assassin's Scars
《Sadie》Dragon Tamer
《Blade》Search for the Fae
《Blade》The Resistance
《Blade》The Daydreamer's Club: Class of 2001
《Blade》The Cantonesia Caper
《June》Beyond Reasonable Doubt
《Sadie》The Goddess' Chosen
《Kailyn》I'm an Extra in a Tragedy Novel
《Kailyn》The Best Friend Equation
《Kailyn》To Know You
《Kailyn》I'll Remember
《Ananas》 To Seek the Truth
《June》Fated Desires
《Arena》The Sky Is Yellow
《Sara》 Jackal Jim: The Hunt Is On
《June》Dark Empire: Devils War and Love
《Ananas》 Love At Dawn
《Ananas》A Kiss from Death
《Sara》Turning Crimson
《Arena》Resilience
《Blade》The Wolf In Me
《Ananas》Fangs or Tails
《Ananas》Stay With Me
《Ananas》The Last Demonic Spirit
《Yasmin》Cupid's Magic
《Yasmin》Autobot Academy
《Sara》 Fifty Shades of Blood
《Sara》Rajkahini
《Ananas》 The Story of Us
《Staris》 The Elf Witch
《Swaralee》Half-A-Man
《Dinara》 Just Add Witches
《Ananas》I Will Wait
《Swaralee》 A'roya
《Swaralee》Ryuko & Yuki
《Swaralee》A'raya
《Dee》The Waves Whisper
《Swaralee》Fourteen Ways of Looking at a Cicada
《Dee》 SUG4RPOP
《Dee》 A Black Cat
《Swaralee》 Whirlwind
《Swaralee》Pick and Choose Me
《Dee》Reborn Shadows: Destiny's Thread
《Kailyn》My Melancholy
《Swaralee》Paint Me Saved
《Sara》Till Sunrise
《Dee》Deviant
《Adriane》The Boy Next Door
《Kailyn》Emotions of a Broken Heart
《Swaralee》Kiss Me If You Dare
《Swaralee》A Life Worth Living
《Trilogy》The Greatest Villain of all Time
《June》Azariah
《June》A Wedding Investigation
《Dee》Haywire Ranger
《Swaralee》Brutal Bonding
《Swaralee》Fragile
《Swaralee》The Last Wolf
《Adriane》Invisible Strings
《June》The Saga of Mafioso
《Yasmin》Dungeon
《Kailyn》Creatures in Depth
《Kailyn》Coffee Shop: Poetries, Oneshots
《Ananas》The Love and Pain Diary
《Kailyn》Zelor Knights
《Adriane》James Knight
《Ananas》Torn (Love and Revenge)
《Sara》Some Days Are Like That
《Sara》The Cursed Kingdom
《Trilogy》Mirrored In Her
《Yasmin》Kingdom of Carnage
《Yasmin》Life Within The Halls
《Azan》The Gunner and the Florist
《Kailyn》Tales of the Black Sheep
《Kailyn》One Day! One Year! One Lifetime!
《Kailyn》Seret
《Kailyn》VEILED DESIRES
《Kailyn》Kayadhu Kalyaan
《Yasmin》Veiled Desires
《Trilogy》Veiled Desires
《Yasmin》Heartwell: Incandescence
《Ananas》The Mad Treasure: The Stowaway
《Adriane》Sweet Night
《Pooja》Secret Signs
《Ananas》Watch the World Rot
《Adriane》248 Days
《Pooja》How to Royalty
《Pooja》The Vegans: Reign of Entity
《Pooja》Cotton Popps
《Pooja》Silent
《Pooja》Evaughn
《Romana》The Cursed Shell
《Adriane》Truth or Dare: Love Edition
《Pooja》Love Never Dies
《Pooja》The Right to Die
《Romana》This Love Must Go On
《Trilogy》Stolen Hearts, Shattered Minds
《Pooja》Fated to Be You
《 Maria 》Targeted
《Pooja》Mr. Weirdo
《Pooja》Admiring the Light

《Pooja》Horns VS. Halo

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By Rose-Gold_Community

Reviewer: Just_Me_Pooja

Client: glassgalaxi

Cover: 4/10

The current cover, upon careful consideration, appears to deviate significantly from the unfolding narrative, creating a notable disconnection for potential readers. The design lacks a cohesive alignment with the story's essence, potentially hindering its effectiveness. A comprehensive revamp is strongly recommended to craft a visually engaging representation that not only informs but also resonates more closely with the narrative's themes. A redesigned cover should aim to create a compelling visual appeal, fostering a stronger connection with the intended audience.

Title: 5/10

While the existing title is acceptable, its shortcomings become evident in its failure to provide a clear indication of the story's essence. The term "pointless" implies a potential mismatch between the title and the narrative. A strategic revision is imperative to encapsulate the central theme more explicitly, ensuring the title serves as an informative and intriguing entry point for readers. The revised title should aim to strike a balance between intrigue and clarity, offering a more precise and engaging preview of the story's unique premise.

Description: 6/10

The available description, though present, lacks the depth required to provide a meaningful insight into the story and its characters. An expanded and enriched description is imperative to offer potential readers a more comprehensive overview. An improved description should act as a compelling teaser, enticing readers with a clearer understanding of what awaits them within the narrative.

Plot: 6/10

The plot, though different, carries similarities with other stories, potentially diluting its uniqueness. While three parts may not fully reveal the narrative's depth, exploring ways to introduce distinctive elements or twists could set the story apart. A balance between familiarity and innovation would ensure a captivating and memorable storyline

Chapters: 7/10

The chapters exhibit commendable traits, being of medium length and showcasing good grammar. The effort to detail the narrative within these limited sections is evident, laying a foundation that could benefit from more depth and intricacies to further enrich the reader's experience.

Blurbs: 6/10

While the existing blurbs display brevity and simplicity, some are deemed somewhat inconsequential. A concerted effort to enhance their impact involves expanding their number and depth. Each blurb should serve as a tantalizing glimpse into different facets of the narrative, offering readers a more comprehensive and intriguing preview. This refinement aims to create a more engaging and nuanced set of blurbs, ensuring they effectively capture the reader's interest.

Grammar and Vocabulary: 14/20

Grammar and vocabulary, being crucial components of effective storytelling, have demonstrated strength but hold untapped potential for enhancement. A more enriched vocabulary can elevate the narrative, creating a more immersive reading experience. Fine-tuning grammar ensures a smoother and more polished presentation, contributing to the overall professionalism and readability of the storytelling. This adjustment aims to strike a balance between clarity and complexity, enriching the language used in the narrative for a more rewarding reading experience.

Plot: 6/10 The plot, though different, carries similarities with other stories, potentially diluting its uniqueness. While three parts may not fully reveal the narrative's depth, exploring ways to introduce distinctive elements or twists could set the story apart. A balance between familiarity and innovation would ensure a captivating and memorable storyline.

Twist : N/a

Overall Enjoyment: 5/10

The limited length of the story has impacted the reader's ability to fully comprehend the plot, resulting in diminished enjoyment. A more extensive and completed narrative would likely provide a more satisfying and engaging experience for the reader.

Total: 50/100

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