( FINISHED ) Wings of Fire OC Rating

Canyonrock

OC belongs to @Michellep920

Name: Canyonrock

Hmm, it's a unique name, and I like it, just, for some reason it gives me a Sand/Mud hybrid feel. But hey, that's just me. It's a nice name regardless

Age: 13

An adult!

Gender: Male

Noice

Sexuality: Asexual (although this does not mean he is not romantically attracted to anyone, just not sexually attracted to anyone)

Nice

Tribe: Pureblood Mudwing

Mudwings! Don't see a lot of those.

Looks: He's small for a Mudwing. A little less square (idk) looking like others. In the dark, you can barely see him, as he has dark brown scales. His underwings are golden brown with a few specks of black. He isn't particularly skinny, but not fat either. His eyes are light yellow, so light that they are almost white.

The yellow/white eyes kinda add a pop of colour, I like it. I don't know how I feel about Dark Brown Scale and Golden Brown Scale combo tho. Idk I'd probably have to see it drawn out. Anyway, nice description!

Personality: Although he grew up poor, he acts like a princess. Like he is better than everyone else. As you can probably see, I said princess, not prince. He acts like a girl.  He can be modest a TIMES. He is not everything he says he is. He does not really LIE, but he boasts quite a bit. He gets confused a ton, and when someone says he is wrong his temper flares up. He is not all bad though. He is a bit of a tsundere. He is actually quite kind and loving.

Hmm, this personality isnt bad, but not great ether. Some things don't make sense, 'He boasts a lot, but he can be modest at times.' He must have a reason for acting modest, maybe when he's by a position of power (I.E, Queen, Soilder). Overall, this personality okay.

Backstory: He was born to a poor family that wasn't powerful or wealthy. He vowed to himself that he would be strong and let his family be happy. Other dragonets would always tease him because his family was poor. He found out the only way to have them leave him alone was to boast and tease back. His first job was a fruit salesman (yeah, such a well paying job). He then stopped because there were little to no customers because he asked for too much for his fruit and vegetables. He searched for a higher paying job but could not find much he could apply for because of his young age and little experience. He is still searching for a job with high pay to help his family.

When people use the 'Born to a poor family' storyline, the character usually becomes rich at the end. However, I like that he's searching for a job but this backstory seem bit unfinished. What happened after? Did he ever find a better job? What about his siblings? Also, is he the Bigwing, since he had the job to support his family?

Relatives: Mother - Agate, Father - Jaguar, Sister -  Harvest, Brother - Clifftop
No known cousins (and I am too lazy to add aunts + uncles).

Nice names, I'm guessing he doesn't know his parents like most Mudwings.

Friends: His only friends, and best friends - Amber (Female, Mudwing, Age 12) and Desolate (Male, Mudwing, Age 13). 

Nice names again, but do they help him find a job? When do they come in in the backstory?

Crush: None at the moment.

Okay

Abilities: Can breath under water for an hour like most Mudwings

Okay

Overall I give Canyonrock a 7/10. Work on backstory, and a bit on personality and looks, then you should be good!