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Review by Elysia: Aurora

Title: Aurora

Author: georgie1617

Reviewer: ScarredHeroes

Grammar + Punctuation: 4/5

I thoroughly fell in love with it within the span of the first paragraph. Your eloquent style of description was enchanting. There were some parts where you missed the period of the sentence after the dialogue, where the close quotations were placed.

Writing Style: 2.5/5

I felt like your beginning was rushed quite a bit, seeing as the story lies in the genre of fantasy. I was not able to conjure a good idea of the location nor the characters or any aspect of the story thoroughly.

I feel like this is where your story could definitely improve and make a huge difference, in addition with a little bit of dialogue and action where you show what she's feeling and not 'tell' as information. This includes her inner monologues of vowing to prove herself equal, right after she requests Prince Ares funds for a business venture, to which he suggests alternatives.

I would've maybe understood it better if you would've shown the transitioning of Athena becoming Aurora, giving a better view for me to understand how the chaos had occurred and how Athena adjusts herself into Aurora's life.

Characterisation: 3.5/5

Athena is very bold and intelligent and I love it. I love how she isn't afraid to tell the truth about herself: how she's a devil beneath all that angelic exterior. Although, I did find it a little weird of how she accepted the transition and eased into without apprehension. But the tactics and business related brains she carries literally took me away. I feel like you didn't go in depth with the other characters which, I think, you might delve into as the story proceeds.

Plot + Originality: 4/5 

A very different outtake in the fantasy genre and that's the first reason why I enjoyed reading every chapter. The plot goes a little too fast for my liking, like I had mentioned, and I found the descriptions a little too less to provide the reader an imagination of where these events are taking place. But the plot is very much interesting and enjoyable, making me eager to know how Athena, in Aurora's place, manages to live an independent and strong life with her brains and wit.

OVERALL SCORE: 14/20