review #173: P.S I Hate You(Harry Styles)

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by laly13

Dedicated to BritishBums

by laly13

author: BritishBums

rating: PG-13

read it if: you want a cliche story with satisfying feels

plot:

"Harry. Come over tonight?" "I can't.. I was sleeping." He said, slightly annoyed that I called him up at like 3 in the morning. "Please." I rolled my eyes. I waited for a response, as I could hear shuffling at the other end of a line. "Do you want to have sex tonight?" I smiled, biting my lip. "Pleasure to." He lowly chuckled, as I yawned. "I'll be there in about ten minutes." "I'm naked under the sheets." "Maybe five, then." I could hear him moving around already, me guessing he was fumbling with his jeans before I hear him head downstairs. I smirked. "Oh and by the way." "Yeah?" He breathed out. "I hate you." -------------------------- We were the complete opposites, as you can see.. But we both had one single thing in common.

review:

I'm just going to do a short pros and cons

-Pro of this story is the feels. If you don't end satisfied with the story at least you'll have the feels factor check marked in the list of "story expectations"

-Cons is how the plot shows something, but the story gives something completely different. When I saw the plot I got so captivated I was excited when I actually got to read it, but when I was around chapter 5 I had a huge WTF face and my main thought at the moment was "wow, now this is a example of a writing by a 12-13 year old". And the fucking comments for every single pause dot didn't help either.

With a great plot, nice grammar, well made development... read it if you don't care about cliches or massive proffessionality

note to author:

If you're reading this, thanks for making this. I give 3 stars to this because as I said before you can make good sexual frustration but the story itself wasn't the type I would be rereading specific chapters until I memorized them. hope this didn't hurt you in any way. Keep writing and take care ;)

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