Fanfiction Reviews By Laly13 Vol. 2(Requests Closed)

review #138: He Never Cheated On Me(Niall Horan\Zayn Malik)

author: nialler_forver_1

rating: PG-13

read it if: you like the title

plot:

Alex, was just a usual normal girl. She had a boyfriend, Niall Horan from One direction. When she thinks Niall cheated on her with some girl Demi things get rough. But when she finds out Zayn likes her and is using another girl to maker her jealous things go down hill...

review:

I overworked my brain to think of what to write, but then I decided to just write what I saw int he story

-The title and plot are useless,since the drama shown is just little bumps in the story

-Harry suddenly liking the girl was something stupid and WTF since it happened and vanished so fast

-There was a bipolar part where the boys fought, they forgave each other but a hour later one of them ended in the hospital. If I express what I felt I will be censored here in Wattpad

-The girl having and dumping Niall and making a test to see if she stayed with Niall or Zayn was pretty inmature in my eyes.

With a interesting plot, grammar that needs editing, flash development...read it if you just want to read ANYTHING no matter the massive flaws

note to author:

If you're reading this,thanks for making this. I give this story 1 star; it was too flash ans confusing I couldn't even get to 5% of enjoyement level. I recommend you a massive rewriting,nothing else. Hope this didn't hurt you, just tried to be sincere. Keep writing and take care ;)

Last review on my vacation,hope you enjoyed this. Comment,share,vote,follow, read my fanfic reviews vol.1,if you read teen fiction read my teen fiction reviews book,and if you have a story,share it here or message me ;)