Fanfiction Reviews By Laly13 Vol. 2(Requests Closed)

review #168:Enhance(Louis Tomlinson)

author: BelWatson

rating: PG-13

read it if: you like when sports are very involved in fanfics

plot:

She just wants to be a sport journalist. She is always interviewing the best players in our Uni and sometimes she ends up dating them, but they always break her sweet heart.

I would never do that, but she would never interview me even less date me because I'm just a regular football player in the team. I'm not the best, but I want to be. I want her to notice me.

This year I'll be the best one. This year she will notice me.

review:

Gonna do the very rare "prons" for this review

-First I'm gonna start with what I liked. First thing is the balance the author did for the girl of the story: she is a tomboy who really enjoys sports, but still has her girl side present and active

-And I really liked soccer being involved because: is my favorite sport, and it helps the love part avoid becoming a really annoying thing (because the soccer parts are very active so you can get a little distracted with a nice game)

-The first pron is the whole lessons topic. I think it was cool giving a little conscience to the reader that if there's no communication between a couple and you let jealousy and prejudice take over the relationship, what was a paradise can turn into a massive hell. And ok, learning something in a book is a fantastic thing, but I also seek for having fun while reading, and I didn't found that fun in this book. I felt I was reading a Health and Lifestyle Textbook (and I really hate that class with a passion) than a fanfic

-The other pron is the evolution of the book. It first started with him trying to get his crush to notice him and it finished with them going through the true side of each other. I must say I really like evolutions because you can't get bored with them, but they also can confuse you if you can't keep good track of plot changes or, in other cases, desmotivate you from reading cause it isn't what you're seeking anymore

With a good plot, good grammar, good development... read it if you like sports or want a example that relationships that look perfect also has flaws

note to author:

If you're reading this, thanks for making this. To be honest, this is one of my least favorite works of you because of what I said before: I didn't had a lot of fun while reading it. It doesn't mean this was a horrible story, but I wouldn't give this a rating of 5 stars just for that. If this seems like a bad and\or insultive review then a million apologies for that. Keep writing and take care ;)

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