Fanfiction Reviews By Laly13 Vol. 2(Requests Closed)

review #152: Possessive Love(Harry Styles)

author: eternitylarry

rating: N\R

read it if: you want to read ANYTHING with a smut bonus

plot: not available

review:

Ok, so I found this book(wich is a adaptation of 50 Shades Of Grey),and I got it to get a idea of the original book(since if I read it that's my death wish). The only thing I read from the original was the first chapter, and this book made a good imitation.But the rest of the book is a different story:

-The whole book can be defined with one word: bipolar. In one chapter she swears she hates him,and in the next she is head over heels for him

-There's more author's notes than chapters,and one thing I hate about stories is chapters wasted on author's notes

-The story has some time leaps that can make anyone say "what the fuck just happened?"

-Updates are slower than a snail

With no plot,so-so grammar, confusing and flash development...read it if you only care about smut(cause there's some of it and it's made decently)

note to author:

If you're reading this,thanks for making this. If I say everyhting that's on my mind this won't end pretty,so I'll just recommend a massive edit, triple proofread on every chapter, and more updates and less notes. Keep writing and take care ;)

There's nothing else I can say(eh eh),so hope you enjoyed this. Comment,share,vote,follow,read my fanfic reviews book vol.1,if you read teen fiction read my teen fiction reviews book,and if you have a story share it here or message me ;)