Fanfiction Reviews By Laly13 Vol. 2(Requests Closed)

review #107-Blackmail(Harry Styles)

author: Polka_Dot_Cutie

rating: PG-13

read it if: you like [Y\N]

plot:

Imagine this: Bad boy Harry Styles moves to town. He finds out an extremely damaging secret about you, and now uses it to blackmail you into being his little sex toy. What lengths will he go to to keep you in his possesion? Will you end up falling for the bad boy? Will your secret get out? Read on to find out... ;)

review:

A little mature pros and cons for this one

-The first pro is [Y\N] (in case you didn't know it stands for "Your Name"). I like that a lot since we can feel more connected with the story since you or the girl from your mind is the protagonist

-This story is about Harry doing blackmail to a girl by making her do "stuff",and in exchange he doesn't tell to everybody that she did a blowjob a long time ago to her friend(did a spoiler). Thanks to this I learned to never drag myself to that type of blackmail because if everything goes public is double humilliation and makes you look vulnerable,weak and slutty. People, just ignore blackmailers and let them spread; at first it will be a big deal but eventually it'll die

-This shows not everyone's first time is perfect

-And last pro is that this girl,though she's weak, has some moves to stand up for herself. #girlpower

-The first con of this is the grammar. In a few words: it's driving me crazy

-And the last con is that this Harry doesn't have the image of possessive badass in my eyes, and since that's the main factor here the story doesn't go to my top 20 of "best dark stories"

With a good plot,grammar that needs to be fixed,good development... read it if you want to read and you're not looking for something specific or you're in the mood for smut, doesn't matter how good or bad it is

note to author:

If you're reading this,thanks for making this and recommending this. For now this story has 2 stars, but maybe if you develop more the love triangle(if anyone is reading this, yes there's a love triangle too) I'll give 3 1\2. Please take some time to edit the story,it needs one ASAP. Keep writing and take care ;)

Ultimately the reviews are being a handful,but hope you enjoyed this. Comment,share,vote,follow,read my fanfic reviews vol.1,if you read teen fictions read my teen fiction reviews book,and if you have a story,share it here or message me ;)