Title :: 3/10 Song names as the title. Never seen that before.
Cover :: 5/10 Simple yet cute.
Description :: 3/10 Makes it easier to predict the entire story. Too short and a bit boring.
Pace :: 4/10 Decent. I have trouble maintaining my pace while I'm writing anything that's not non-fiction, but you did pretty good.
Concept and plot :: 4/10 Too common. Most of the facfics about k-pop idols start with self-hate and end with love. Since the fanfic is still not completed you have time to improve on that area. Maybe twist it a bit in the middle. If you want suggestions, then you can DM me.
Characters Development :: 4/10 At least "Natasha" was uncommon. Don't use other k-pop idols as the side characters (other than the band members).
Grammar and Vocabulary :: 3/10 In the title our beloved maknae's name is written as "Jungkook" but in the 1st prologue his name is written as "Jeongguk". Stick to one of them. Many ARMYs use both of them but if you grew up saying po-ta-to, don't suddenly change it to po-tah-to and vice-versa. I barely saw any new words. There were so many hyperboles in this fanfic. For example, instead of saying "The heart is an organ" it is put in the following words, "The cardiac muscle is an organ."
Writing style :: 3/10 You kept the story's flow steady. The emotions were expressed in such a way that other readers would be able to connect with the characters and the story.
Overall impression :: 2/10 To me it is just another fanfiction. Maybe try bringing up professions which are underrated in the world of fanfiction such as lawyer, dietitian, physical therapist, etc.
Rating of the book :: 4/10
Total :: 35/100
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