Dreamland Review Archive

Romanogers (T)

Romanogers written by Han_Banana21

i. COVER & TITLE

Your cover is a no for me for a few reasons. It's simple, text-slapped, and the colours don't pop or match. I'd highly recommend getting a new cover from a designer in my reading list. Highly recommend. Your writing is great, and it deserves a better cover.

Your title gives me similar simple vibes. I know that fanfics often have generic titles, but they don't have to. Try giving it something a little more unique than just a ship name or 'falling for you'. I think you can do better with finding a title that draws attention. A significant phrase, object or message works. Try coming up with some different stuff and trying out the possibility of switching your title.

ii. BLURB

Your blurb is short, which I can appreciate, but it doesn't give us much info. That's fine--because we know these characters already and we know what's going to happen. But I would recommend making your blurb a little more eye-catching and slightly less cliche-y. I know it's a scene in your book, which is fine, but it's not all that alluring. Here's what I've done:

My heart is not fluttering.

I'm Natasha Romanoff, trained assassin and deadly killer. My heart does not 'flutter'. And yet here I am, noticing every detail about Steve Rogers as he stands in front of me at the pool of the Avengers compound. I do not catch feelings. My heart is not supposed to flutter.

But it most definitely is.

This is a little more dramatic and eye-catching, but it still doesn't give as many details about the story as I think you could provide. Your blurb is short enough that you have space to work with here, so don't worry about adding in a few extra lines.

0 6 / 1 5

i. PUNCTUATION

#1: COMMAS AND CONJUNCTIONS