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The title is cool! It flows well off the tongue, and has a good werewolf vibe. I know Hunter is Blake's last name, but it also hints at the involvement of wolves, which is nice. And I'm always a sucker for shadow-related titles *looks nervously at my own wolf books*
The cover is fairly simple, but fancy, and I do like it. Wolf is always a big tick when it's a story involving wolves, so we know what we're getting right from first glance. The font has that epic fantasy vibe. I didn't notice the bits of cracked glass around the edges at first, but they're also very cool. The only complaint I'd have is that, while I like the overall dark theme and how that fits with the title, it might be a touch too dark? The wolf's eyes are the only thing that really pops out of the cover, and it's difficult to make out the author's name on a smaller screen. Maybe making the text a little brighter would solve that problem? Otherwise, it's cool and an instant click for me. Because, you know, wolf--
Blurb
You get across pretty much all we need to know, which is good. We know Blake's situation, the main plot detail -- the mysterious woman showing up -- and what's at stake, which especially towards the end of the blurb keeps it hooking. You also very strongly hint at the possibility of romance, which I know is a draw for a lot of people and a good thing to throw out there, but also that there are other mysteries going on save the love story, which sets it apart from a good number of werewolf stories and keeps it interesting.
The main thing I'd say is that it would be good to add that Blake's father is, like, really powerful, as you mention in your Foreword. That's probably more important to know than, say, the fact that Blake is twenty-six years old. To be honest, that whole first paragraph is weaker than the other two, especially its second sentence, which is a little confusing. If I just:
Then, his father turns up on his doorstep and demands he do his duty by choosing a suitable Luna to complete and strengthen his pack before he takes matters into his own hands.
Firstly, it's quite a long sentence without many pauses, which already makes it more difficult to read. I'd probably split it up a bit more. Also, regarding the last 'he', it's unclear whether you're talking about Blake or his father. You don't have to listen to me, but I'll offer a quick fix suggestion:
Until his father, the respected and feared Avery Hunter, turns up on his doorstep. He threatens to take matters into his own hands, unless Blake chooses a suitable Luna to complete and strengthen his pack.
Or something. You can play around with it. I'm mostly just highlighting the fact that it doesn't read quite right.
Generally though, your blurb is good. There are other places where sentences feel a bit long, but that's mostly because there are a few missing commas. But I'll get to that later in the Writing Style section.
