Review 101 // Talia Lillian Bennett

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Props to you for somehow making the comments aesthetic don't think that's been done before.

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

That's cool, I've worked off of a lot of old ocs so it's always a good starting point

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That's cool, I've worked off of a lot of old ocs so it's always a good starting point.

Character information

Character information

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I love her already

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I love her already. You don't see enough characters with braces and that's nice to see. I really like her design and everything. Her personality is really well thought out too, however I think you can afford to add some more positive traits in order for her to be more balanced and leveled out as a character.

Maybe add some more hobbies but apart from that this is good.

Relationships

Yes! Oc friends and a healthy relationship with guardian figures! You unfortunately don't see enough of these and I really like this

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Yes! Oc friends and a healthy relationship with guardian figures! You unfortunately don't see enough of these and I really like this. Maybe you could add some more detail but aort form that this is pretty snazzy.

Backstory

Okay this works but I'd like some more information of her home life and her interactions with her family and those around her

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Okay this works but I'd like some more information of her home life and her interactions with her family and those around her. Just some more development and detail would go a long way here.

Other

This works well but maybe think of some extra details like what wand she has and what her patronus is

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This works well but maybe think of some extra details like what wand she has and what her patronus is.

Stats

Stats are balanced and make sense, no comments here

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Stats are balanced and make sense, no comments here.

Final thoughts
I really like this oc and everything you've put into her is good! All I can really suggest is to add more to her to develop her further and make her even better as a character. But apart from that, really good job.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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