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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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I've already said my thoughts on this. I assume it's the same universe as the previous one but with a different plot and setting.
Character information
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Right yeah this works for the most part, but unlike the last review you've given her a distinguished personality trait, but it feels like you've given her one trait to play off. People aren't just one note characters and the goal is to make them as realistic as possible, so add some more traits maybe. Again, careful with age, even though it varies throughout the plot, you really have to show development if that's the case, and surely wouldn't her personality change as she grows??
Relationships
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These relationships work pretty well, just make sure they help build up and develop the character.
Backstory
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Whilst this works for the character, he doesn't quite look like a backstory so maybe add some more key events and points in her life so it feels like she has an easy flowing life.
Other
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This is fine, just make sure we see her training or you mention it at some point so her skills make sense and don't seem op.
Stats
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Same as I said for the last review, balanced stats are everything, you just gotta lower one five and balanced it out a bit.
Final thoughts She sounds like a pretty decent character overall, you just have to work on developing her and making sure everything works and runs smoothly.
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