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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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This is definitely an improvement and everything flows a lot better and makes much more sense. The only thing I can really say is develop her more to the point of where you know her like she's a best friend. Also, these dark thoughts weren't here previously, is this a hint at a mental illness? If so I recommended researching a specific mental illness and showing specific symptoms from it without blatantly saying what she has.
Relationships
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I've already said my peace in this in the past, but good job adding reasoning and logic behind her feelings for people, that really adds to a character.
Backstory
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Very well done on fleshing this out a lot more, this has meaning and will affect the character and adds to her development. It also makes a lot more sense about why the death of her dog would be significant.As far as backstories go, this is pretty good but I suggest thinking up some other significant events in her past.
Other/stats
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These states are fine and I have nothing important to say here.
Final thoughts There has been a large improvement with this character since last time I reviewed her, so very well done with that. Again, I recommend some further developments and some additional fleshing out and I think you'll have a great, well-rounded character.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
