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Ya boi's got another character review. This time it's from Yo_M0M
Basics and grounding / character information
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can't critique the appearance because the link won't work lol. Anyway, I do like the sound of this characters and I find killer characters some of the most interesting. I also like that you're asexual, I don't see enough characters that are ace, especially regarding killers. My only real critique here is to be careful with the hide and seek and 'playing with your food' tropes, they're incredibly common in murderous ocs. But since this isn't a creepypasta oc, you have more of a chance of getting away with it, but just be careful how you go about it if you ever want to write her story.
Relationships
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t makes sense for a killer, but be careful writing about everyone around being dead. It's very cliché and common to find, but if done well then it should be fine. However, I like that she is single and will always be, there's a lot of killer characters that are made and then find their true love and blah, it's unrealistic, so having your character not be romantically involved with anyone is great!
Backstory
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This is a pretty decent backstory,but orphanages and science experiments are very common. This trope if done well is incredible and an incredibly interesting thing to read. The experiment itself is pretty unique and an interesting concept, and the scientists not being evil is also something that is uncommon. I think that with these traits balancing it out, you can pull off this story. But, I think you should add more details to really refine the plot, such as doing research into mental disorders to make sure you create a realistic mental state for your character.
Other
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Okay damn, I didn't quite get this at first so I had to read over it, but it seems pretty hard to describe. Anyway, I understand it now and I really like this concept!! It's very unique and I don't think I've seen anything like this, so really good job!
Stats
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These stats make a lot of sense and they also fit with the rules I normally recommend people use when making stats. So good job.
Final thoughts I really like the concept and thought that has gone into this character, all I really suggest doing is adding further details in order to balance out some of the clichés. Apart from that, it's great!!! Really good job!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
