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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Sounds like an interesting fantasy universe. Make sure when introducing new concepts to the universe you're not overdoing it because you'll lose the audience.
Character information
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This works for the most part but I think you should add more detail to the personality and appearance to make her feel more fleshed out.
Relationships
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These relationships work but make sure they're developed and fleshed out to make sure that they feel realistic and make sense.
Backstory
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Okay so, what you've given me works but I feel like there should be more to her Backstory. Add some more key events and points so that she feels like she's had a realistic and fleshed out life. Also be careful portraying war and bullying, it's not always done very well and can be hard to tackle.
Other
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These work just make sure she's grows into them overtime to avoid her being op.
Stats
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Stats are balanced so they're fine.
Final thoughts I think that she's a pretty good character but some more development would go a long way to make her better. Just work on her a bit more and everything should work out just fine.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
