Review 145 // Ivy Elle

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Basics and grounding

Basics and grounding

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Alright. All I have to say is be careful making your mains OP, even if the villains are stronger. It's no fun routing for a character who's already strong enough to do as they please.

Character information

Character information

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This all works pretty well but be careful when making a God character to do it well, since it can be tricky

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This all works pretty well but be careful when making a God character to do it well, since it can be tricky. All I really suggest here is add more detail, especially to the personality and hobbies.

Relationships

It's nice seeing more then one love interest at different times, it's realistic since its rare that actual people stay with one person for life

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It's nice seeing more then one love interest at different times, it's realistic since its rare that actual people stay with one person for life.

The only issue I have here is to be careful with having her parents be missing because it's normally done pretty bad. You gotta show the effects of it.

Just be sure to develop these relationships and make sure you show their effects.

Backstory

Alright I kinda get what you're on about here but I recommend creating a more detailed Backstory for this specific character

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Alright I kinda get what you're on about here but I recommend creating a more detailed Backstory for this specific character. Because, you told me about her birth and the start of her journey but nothing in between. Work on her reaction to her parents disappearance and add other key events.

Other

Other

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I know you said characters in this world were OP but this is like OP

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I know you said characters in this world were OP but this is like OP. The weaknesses do help it but I suggest cutting down some of these powers because even in an op world, this is a lot.

Stats

Stats are reasonably balanced so it's fine

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Stats are reasonably balanced so it's fine.

Final thoughts
Overall, this is a pretty good character but I think you should rethink and flesh out a couple of things, specifically the Backstory aspect because there's not that much there. Apart from that, she's pretty decent.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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