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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
Here is an oc for an original universe by SmexyBunni
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
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It's always good to take inspiration from music and books because they help open your imagination.
Character information
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Okay so I really like this characters design and a lot of thought has clearly been put into her, so good job. However, I have a few issues with her personality. Her personality type is very common in ocs, especially ones that aren't meant to be on the edgier side of things. It's not a personality trait to be crazy or anything like that, just like it's not cool to smoke (don't care if ya smoke, it just ain't a personality trait). Psychological damage isn't a personality trait, it's something that can have some kind of effect on a character. I recommend doing research on mental disorders and revamping some of her personality.
Relationships
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These stats are fine as long as they make sense but make sure that you show their impact of the character and how she changes.
Backstory
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This backstory is fine, but I recommend adding more detail, normally there is some kind of reason for drifting from loved ones, in this case I assume it's mental illness. Definitely research a specific mental illness and show the symptoms in the character.
Other
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Don't have much to say here honestly.
Stats
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These stats are fine since they're balanced.
Final thoughts I like this character for the majority, but I think you need to change a few things and do a fair bit of research on mental health. I do have a writing tip on mental health that can be found earlier in this book if you're interested. Apart from that, good job!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
